Comments | shellbaby316: If you read this you will make me very happy :-)

shellbaby316

If you read this you will make me very happy :-)

Feb 20, 2007 19:35

Ok, so I swear a real update will ensue soon, as well as an email reply to Miss Robeano... (sooo sorry!!) but I wanted to see what you guys thought about some stuff...

I'm taking my second level writing class this quarter, geared toward people who want to be teachers. It focuses on children's literature, and strategies on how to teach writing and ( Read more... )

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thejwatt February 21 2007, 08:45:53 UTC

Shelley, those were both great! The poem...what I really like about it is that you recall these things in such great detail that it makes me want to remember where I came from and how my childhood shaped me as person. I mean you can argue this all day, but I do believe it's how you progress in your early life that ultimately leads to how you become you as a person, and less (but certainly some) to do with you genetically. I really like the verse that starts off with the "sidewalk chalk" and the "parawewogram" part was great. And the way you found that moment of tension at the end with the new school parellels so many different transitions: college, jobs, all of it. You begin to remember so vividly the moment of just overflowing nervousness and trying to overcome that. That was a long comment ( ... )

shellbaby316 February 22 2007, 07:42:07 UTC

WOW! Thanks for the very specific feedback- that really helps a lot in figuring out the strengths and weaknessess of a piece of writing.

I'm really glad that the poem made you want to remember things from your childhood too. That's something my teacher says we should aim for in our writing- get the reader thinking. And when it comes to what you said about how "writing is best learned by doing", you are exactly right! We had a guest speaker in my class who honestly couldn't have emphasized that more.

I'm also glad that you liked the parody and caught on to the subtleties! It makes me really happy when people figure out my silly puns and actually think they're funny. :-P

Thanks for the comment, Jordan!!! :-D

chizlak February 22 2007, 00:06:59 UTC

They were both really good!

Now can I brag to people that I have a roommate who is a really good writer?? lol...

shellbaby316 February 22 2007, 07:44:01 UTC

I mean...I'm not gonna stop you... :-P

Thanks Megan!!!

iluvfan February 22 2007, 05:28:17 UTC

Nice writing, the glasses idea was a real nice touch.

shellbaby316 February 22 2007, 07:48:16 UTC

Thanks for that insightful and enthusiastic comment, honey. :-P

FYI everyone else, he wants props. The "glasses idea" was his.

wow tophhoying March 3 2007, 18:51:11 UTC

that was pretty awesome...you're a good writer, and i really didn't expect it out of you to come up with something so...imaginative, no offense or anything, but that was realllly good - only comment...how does a captain of the OSU baseball team with a state title? maybe a national title? it's minor - i could understand if you were talking about his high school team..but yea...i say keep writing

toph