Remix of nox_candida: Keep Them Closer

[nox_candida]

Original Story:
Author: nox_candida
Title & Link: A Friend In Need
Pairings & Rating: Sherlock Holmes/John Watson, John Watson/Mary Morstan, Teen
Warnings/Content Notes: none

Remix Story:
Author: [REDACTED]
Title: Keep Them Closer
Pairings & Rating: John Watson/Mary Morstan, Sherlock Holmes/John Watson, Teen
Warnings/Content Notes: none
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Comments

[nox_candida]

This is so awesome

[dioscureantwins]

Wow, MA, what an interesting spin you've given to the original through the change of POV.

As a staunch Sherlock fan I'm not much of an admirer of Sally Donovan but I do sympathise with her. It's obvious she's hard-working and serious about her job and very good at it and then to have this arrogant prat constantly telling you off... oh, it's enough to enrage even the most patient person on Earth.

You've drawn a perfect portrait of petty vindictiveness and how it can distort our minds and observation... until the veil is ripped away.

Beautifully done.

[pipmer1]

Oh so clever! I liked how you took an almost throw away line from the first fic about Sally's lack of observational skills, and made this all about how she missed Sherlock's deep feelings for John.

Also, I could be wrong, but it looks like you incorporated some of the characteristics of S3 Mary into this fic, even though the original was written pre-series 2. Which makes this line ("Sally clasped her hands together to keep them from shaking, and wondered what else she had missed.") even more chilling. Well done!

[ficklepig]

Wow, nice. I'm sold on why Sally would honestly hate Sherlock. He's a dangerous, arrogant interference in legitimate police work, and if you believed he was stringing along and damaging people you cared about ... grrrrr. And, as pipmer1 noted, you integrated the questions about Mary's past in a way that resonates beyond the end of the piece.