Going Down, Chapter Ten: Starry Night

[shieldmaid1]

Hey, y'all--Sorry about being even later than I promised yesterday. It's been a bit of a traumatic day, as you already know. But here it is; hope you enjoy and thanks for reading

Comments

[shieldmaid1]

Hmm . . . tempting. We'll have to see how long the fire lasts (the one in the trees, not the one burning in certain people's, um, loins . . .). ;) I too can't wait for E & J to meet again--let's hope it's not too much longer. Thanks so much for your kind words. :)

[poppyhoney_67]

Oh no Jen, you cant end it like that! You cant have that creep Randall lying to Ennis, just cos he wants to put his own grubby hands on Jack! I cant wait another week to see what happens!!!

Gosh Jen, I was on tenderhooks throughout that whole chapter it was fantastic - you really described the whole fire scene wonderfully it was so vivid, I could smell the smoke and feel the heat, it was amazing.

I was so glad that Ennis got to speak to Jack - I loved how that was done, with that sweet Julia setting it all up - does she know about Ennis and Jack then? - and oh boy, I could feel the tension between Ennis and Jack over the wire, you wrote that so wonderfully well, and Ennis being so brave to tell Jack his story. Umm, I love your Brokeback memories, Jen, they are just gorgeous. I am dying to hear Ennis tell Jack that he loves him - well, I'm assuming thats what he wants to say, right?

Fantastic chapter Jen, this story is so so good, cant wait for the next chapter.

Love the song lyrics too!

[shieldmaid1]

Hi C--Glad you liked it! Julia's been a very fun character to write so far; my vision of her keeps changing. I have a feeling she'll stick around here for a while longer. Thanks so much for reading. xx

[my_lil_darlin]

Goddamned Randall anyway. *grumble, mumble*

This chapter was a real page turner. Lots of excitement, romance, and best of all, Ennis's longing for his man was palpable. Great writing there, as always!

[shieldmaid1]

That is most kind. Thank you very much for reading. Hoping to update again on Friday. :)

[joetheone]

Well, Randall may think he can convince or coerse Jack into doing something with him but with the bit of knowledge that Ennis gave Jack just now I don't think Randall will get his way with Jack at all. I am worried he may do something drastic a man who is turned down like Randall well can be dangerous. I am real proud Ennis took on helping out like he did and it just shows what kind of man he is a great man that we all dream of meeting someday in our lives. I really like your story please keep writing. Joe

[shieldmaid1]

Thanks so much for reading. I really want Jack to be able to look at Ennis and Randall side by side and understand what's really important to him, what each man represents. ;)

[scarlettbaby]

OH no
Don't leave it here
I'm scarfed for Jack out there in that fire with Randall.

[shieldmaid1]

No worries . . . he won't be out there for long. ;) Thanks for reading!