Thanks, Lindsey. I find Alma to be the hardest character to write. I want to be sympathetic toward her, though she's obviously the character who has the biggest problem with them together (other than Aguirre, perhaps). I tried to show her in pain and denial, but trying to do the appropriate "Christian" thing. Thanks for reading--new update will be up soon. :)
Re: Down the Long Roadshieldmaid1April 26 2007, 01:36:56 UTC
Thank you! I always appreciate it when someone comments on my use of imagery or symbols--I try to put it in there even when it isn't totally smooth. New chapter will be up soon.
Sweet and well suprising just like a birthday partyjoetheoneApril 4 2007, 17:39:22 UTC
I well thought it was amazing how Alma knew of things and well even though it hurt her she was very good at handling things like a real lady should even giving Jack a nice sandwich and some water before talking and then you suprised me so much just like I thought that Jack was suprised when Ennis said his mind was made up on wanting to be with Jack. Then the love scene so well hot. Joe
“You asshole.” Jack took a step forward, clenched his fists, ready to go after Ennis with all the strength left in him. “I can’t believe I drove a thousand miles jus to stand in your kitchen ‘n hear you talkin’ this shit. You son of a bitch.”
“Jack, wait.” Ennis held up a hand, and Jack came back to himself, realizing that he probably shouldn’t try to kick Ennis’s ass in front of his wife, with his children sleeping in the other room. “I jus mean-this ain’t easy for me, but-I’m ready now.”
Jack just stared at him, panting, aware of his fingernails digging into his palms. “You’re ready? For what?”
“For you, Jack. That’s what I meant. We ain’t-” Ennis turned to Alma. “We ain’t got much to talk about, Alma, cause me ‘n Jack, we already made up our minds.”
You really got me here :) Just like Jack, I feared Ennis would back down. But he didn't. Yay Ennis!
When he reached the bottom, he raised his head and looked into Jack’s eyes with a gaze that spoke of pain and fear. “Said goodbye to ‘em, Jack,” he said hoarsely. “Probably the
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I'm so glad you liked it! I always give a schoolgirl squee! when I see that people are actually quoting my story. Yes, I am trying to make Alma a more sympathetic character here--as you said, she's had some time to get used to the idea of Ennis's true love/sexual orientation. I think she and Ennis need to maintain good relations for their daughters' sake. Stay tuned; new chapter will be up soon.
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“Jack, wait.” Ennis held up a hand, and Jack came back to himself, realizing that he probably shouldn’t try to kick Ennis’s ass in front of his wife, with his children sleeping in the other room. “I jus mean-this ain’t easy for me, but-I’m ready now.”
Jack just stared at him, panting, aware of his fingernails digging into his palms. “You’re ready? For what?”
“For you, Jack. That’s what I meant. We ain’t-” Ennis turned to Alma. “We ain’t got much to talk about, Alma, cause me ‘n Jack, we already made up our minds.”
You really got me here :) Just like Jack, I feared Ennis would back down. But he didn't. Yay Ennis!
When he reached the bottom, he raised his head and looked into Jack’s eyes with a gaze that spoke of pain and fear. “Said goodbye to ‘em, Jack,” he said hoarsely. “Probably the ( ... )
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