5927 fanfic - Dynimates are look like flirting
Title: Dynamites are look like flirting
Fandom: Katekyo Hitman Reborn!
Pairing: GokuTsuna, 5927
Genre: romance, shounen-ai, humour, slice of life
Summary: Gokudera thinking about Dr. Shamal’s tip and tries to captive his beloved Tenth.
Thanks to Relaine to translated my fanfiction to English~
„Dynamites are look like flirting” Thought Gokudera Hayato ( Read more... )
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Relaine's translation was kinda hard to understand. Also I noticed there are fanfics like this on fanfiction.net yesterday (or was it the day before yesterday?). Anyway, the plot was cute, but I think it wasn't very logical. Try more next time 'kay? I'm a crazy fan of 5927 so I was very happy to find 5927 fanfics! ^^
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Hm, I don't understand why the story is not logical. What was my mistake?
And yes, I'm in fanfiction.net too ^^"
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Dissonance
What?! I'm Gokudera-kun's birthday cake?!
These are already my fanfics.
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I don't understand either... It just doesn't feel right about the characters and the scenes... Tsuna doesn't really mind gay love and he doesn't freak out or blush or stutter... And Gokudera too, doesn't care that he's asking his BOSS's love and the fact that he want to kiss a guy, and his sister who makes him faint whenever she appears. The house is too quiet while there are mafia kids in it (even in the actual anime the house has war everyday with Tsuna avoiding poison cooking, greenades from a loud mouth sturborn cowkid and a kungfu using girl who can explode like a bomb if embarrassed). Also you write too fast, the timing was weird. You have to slow down and write about ONE THING more.
I think that's it... since there are parts that I can't understand no matter how much I squeeze my brain... Your friend needs a lot of work... ="=' If I can beta this fic for you I would be glad but I don't have time so gomen...
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