Sudden, unexpected Death Note fanfiction

[shikamarvin]

Fandom: Death Note
Word Count: about 800, I believe
Characters: Mello POV introspection; Near
Summary: Mello thinks about being inferior, and knowing versus understandingNotes: Ideas not quite explored to the author's satisfaction. More references to Greek myth, for some reason, than you can shake a stick at. May, therefore, be among the most

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[pitchkettler]

Oh my do you get him. ♥ Favorite things, because I'm going asdofjapsoifj trying to articulate:

"Mello will never get to drink from the victory cup. Part of him knows this. The rest looks at the cool water and the hanging fruit and gives up on giving up."

"Near wouldn't say set out. Near would say predicted. This is almost worse."

"Mello thinks of himself as having been thrown into the underworld by an unforgiving God, for no sin that he can name or reason he can think of."

"...maybe he's read it in the way that puzzle pieces fall from a box."

"Mello thinks of experience as his, his own, something that Near does not have and will never have, because he is too brilliant for it, like the goddess in the poem whose perfect immortality itself is what makes her groom refuse her. In the end Mello hopes his own mortality will prove itself superior."You've captured the aspect of Mello that drew me to him in the first place: that painful combination of his inferiority-complex/despair and his absolute determination not to accept it

[kuzujuk]

You have no idea how happy this comment makes me. ♥ /flails

I'm glad the metaphors worked! I was kind of torn as I wrote it, thinking, I love this stuff, but will anyone else? I am after all the one who had to put a reference to Napoleon's Russian campaign in her D.Gray-Man fic. Maybe my references are just too high-flown!
So yayyyy :D I'm especially glad that you think the characterization was on-target, though, because that was my biggest worry.

I try to write more than I do! Unfortunately, it doesn't always pan out...

[pitchkettler]

I LOVE YOUR REFERENCES. They make me cavort mentally in geekish fashion. Sometimes one of your history references will go over my head and I'll have to go wiki it, but I know my mythology! :D And it really made this stand out, Tantalus being especially apt.

I get writing not panning out. I have a hard drive full of aborted fic because I a)am a perfectionist and b)have no attention span. :(

[kuzujuk]

HURRAY! :D I can't say I'm entirely sorry for causing you to wiki things, haha, but um MYTHOLOGY, ISN'T IT JUST THE BEST :D

My attention span is my worst enemy. I have years of stories that are not and will never be finished, because I haven't the patience to plot them properly. Stuff like this, actually, is easier for me, because I can let my prose run wild and stick in mythology and other fun things and leave it at a thousand words or so with no real plot.