SHINee Fic Mix 2011 - black_goose

[replaymods]

Title: we can’t punch ourselves awake
Author: black_goose
Pairing: Jonghyun/Onew
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: character death
Author's Notes: I wish this could be longer but time has been a precious thing for the past few weeks. I hope olebade enjoys it all the same :) title is taken from Richard Siken’s poem Little Beast

Original Work: You Brought Me Here (The Best

Comments

[olebade]

wow. i wasn't even expecting my story to get remixed since i had to drop out pretty early. but this is wonderful :) now that i've seen this i almost wish i had expanded on the photos in my original story. thank you, this was perfect

[black_goose]

you're welcome :) I'm just really happy that you liked it! I would like to know more about the stories behind the photos, if you ever get a chance to write them.

[honeyflavor]

aww ;__;

[ivy_llansing]

TT-TT I was smiling throughout the entire story....

then i read the last sentence

TT-TT Jjong~

[jinkibumiminho]

The original story made me cry...
This was really lovely and can certainly stand on its own. The characterizations were wonderful, and I thought the Jonghyun/Taemin sunscreen episode was to die for (at least they didn't trim his leg hair).
[Even knowing there was a character death in the works, I felt the ending was rather abrupt, sort of like some "smut" fics that have a lovely hawt build up, only to finish with "and then they had sex, the end." If there had been just a sentence or two of transition, it would have felt more satisfying to me. It certainly had shock value, which I imagine is what you were going for...hmm...I hope my comment feels constructive and not critical because this is really a great story.]

[emmiwish]

WTF IT WAS SO CUTE. TOTAL D'AWWWWWW JONGYU FAMILY. ADORABLE SOCIOPATH KIDS.

and then the last 2 lines ruined it, i refuse to give a long beautiful comment like i intended. youre so cruel )':

/clings to your sleeve and begs you to revive him