SHINee Shorts 2013: acousticscenery

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Title: Chasing Daylight
Author: acousticscenery
Pairing: Onew/Minho
Rating: PG
Warnings: None.
Word Count: 3192

Comments

[star_chase]

I really, really enjoyed reading this! I loved the tone and the atmosphere you set up, and how simple a story it was but how lovely it was to read! Your writing itself is lovely, and I was pulled into the story so easily. I love onho, they're my ship of ships, and I really liked how you wrote them here!

I liked all the mentions of things not said, things Jinki didn't ask, and him not wanting Minho to know how not annoyed he was with the kidnapping. And I liked the allusions to the development of their relationship, the possible hinted at changes and growth they might have gone through? Little hints like this: There's no argument, no tension. He's more relaxed around Minho - maybe more himself.And I loved all the mentions of the thoughtful things Minho has done for Jinki, how obvious it makes it that Minho is putting Jinki first, is looking out for him, trying to make him comfortable, trying to think of everything

[sansunparapluie]

agreed that the atmosphere is really nice. it's light and there is a sense of peace to it. like it's an (almost) ordinary day, ordinary conversations, ordinary happenings, but you see them through anyway because they're the right bit of sweet and they flow.

one note though, cicadas love the heat so they sing the loudest on hot afternoons. (unless they're higurashi, in which case you hear them during the morning and evening...but there are no higurashi on the korean peninsula.) I think you were thinking of crickets, which are nocturnal insects.

[blacknerdjade]

Okay. *cracks knuckles