아름다웠던 시절로 돌아가고 싶어. [제0휘 (Prelude): 모르는 게 약이다 (Ignorance is Bliss)]
Title: 아름다웠던 시절로 돌아가고 싶어.
Rough Translation: I want to go back to the good old days.
Alternative/English Title: Kim Jonghyun, Because of You My Life has been....Ruined
Prelude: 모르는 게 약이다 (Ignorance is Bliss)
Paring: HoHyun (JongHo)
Genre: AU, Angst, Romance,
Rated: R+/NC17
Summary: Before “his” appearance, Choi Minho’s life was perfect. He had the perfect ( Read more... )
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waiting eagerly for the first chapter =3
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Thanks for your support! I'm glad to hear that you liked it. :D
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sounds like an awesome drama underway
i cant wait for the next part! this sounds so interesting and i wonder what exactly jonghyun did to make minho's 'perfect' life the opposite xD
i hope you update soon! im loving it so far :)
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I think it's a cool choice to make it first person.
There's only a little constructive criticism I can think of, because you are good! <3
Because it's in first person, it would be nice to see a little more emotion in the writing maybe? First person comes across like thoughts, and this was very well-written, but very intellectual sounding. Like it almost feels like Minho is somewhat disconnected emotionally from himself. It could work really well that way, if that's what your going for with Minho's personality. So, I wasn't really sure if I should even say anything. Especially since all he's really done so far is relate his history, so maybe it works that way here. Just a thought for the future chapters. I hope that makes sense <.< My brain is half dead from lack of sleep right now.
But this is so good! Really. My note is more of a thought than an actual criticism because there's definitely nothing bad here :DDD I hope you'll continue this! <3
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