[fic] The "Hooker in a Bar" Fic, Part 4

[shingo_the_pest]

Title: The “Hooker in a Bar” Fic, Part 4
Authors: shingo_the_pest and k_e_wilson
Rating: NC-17
Pairing: Bones/Jim
Warning: explicit sex, prostitution, alcohol, swearing, grumpiness, WIP
Summary: McCoy doesn't usually go to dives like this, where the music is loud and there are beautiful men and women looking for a bite of your wallet. And this Kirk fellow is far too

Comments

[syredronning]

Wonderful descriptions, hot sex, and gruff emotions. Jim going through McCoy's things is almost a little creepy, definitely a little too interested, but it's also an interesting touch for this AU.

One thing that came to my mind while reading this part and the last one: sometimes it's hard for me to follow whether it's Jim's or Bones' POV. But maybe I'm just too used to strict POV.

All in all, it's really a hot and captivating ride and I'm looking forward to the next chapter :)

[shingo_the_pest]

It was a fun chapter to write. :) Kirk is getting attached a little too quickly, and he considers Bones a puzzle for him to play with. This Jim is particularly bad with boundaries.

That's for the crit, it's always welcome. The POV shuffling in the first scene was all me, and I'll make an effort to pin it down in future chapters.

0_o

[shinozaki20]

This story is so freakin' amazing! It's beyond sexy and there's so much angst and tension that's starting to build up, I can't wait to read how it all turns out. I can't wait for more. You're an awesome writer.

Re: 0_o

[shingo_the_pest]

Thank you! I'm glad you're looking forward to more. KE and I really appreciate it. :)

[cockrobinisdead]

I remember reading the first chapter of this story when you first posted it, but then I must have lost track, but I'm glad I took the time to catch up. God, the last two chapters are so hot.

And I kinda like Nosy!Jim. But damnit, poor Janice!

[sangueuk]

I loved this - really hot! Can't wait for the next installment!

[kilala10]

Oh noes! Not rand! I like her ._.