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The Doctor and John Noble Pt. 2

Feb 15, 2009 20:28

Title: The Doctor and John Noble
Authors: shining_suicide and Elliot
Pairing: Ten/Ten II
Genres: Fluff, Pron, PSL
Warning: Language, Pron, AU!
Rating: PG for now (NC-17 later on)
Summary: John Noble wasn’t happy in that world, so he found a way back to his Doctor.
Author's Note: So here's part 2! Remember this is in role play format. Feedback much appreciated! Enjoy ( Read more... )

roleplay, fanfiction, doctor who

Comments 13

jadekirk February 16 2009, 07:13:33 UTC

Fantastic! Can't wait to see what happens next.

shining_suicide February 16 2009, 19:41:19 UTC

Thank you! ♥

joyciel February 16 2009, 07:53:42 UTC

Ah! Love <3!!! Update soon =3!

shining_suicide February 16 2009, 19:40:43 UTC

Thanks for reading! Update coming soon. :D

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shining_suicide February 16 2009, 18:56:09 UTC

lmao, I just love/hate a good cliffhanger, but the next bit should be up soon, cause I'm a sucker for updating with material I have. ><

♥

prof_pangaea February 16 2009, 18:45:05 UTC

hiya, dropping in here from bluesuit_fic. i've read both parts of the fic you've put up and i'm intrigued by the idea, but i think you need to get a beta reader. a lot of your sentence structure is unwieldy, and the mood jumps all over the place, one moment talking about something as weighty and serious as genocide and the next john and the doctor are off having light-hearted fun. as it is, i really like how john is strangely drawn to the doctor, and how the doctor is strangely drawn to john for different reasons, and there's a lot there that you could explore.

shining_suicide February 16 2009, 18:53:34 UTC

haha, well yeah, I should have actually read over it a bit more, but it really wasn't meant to be a fic, it's a role play that I just decided to post to see if people would actually like it at all. We didn't really have any huge plot except for them to interact, since that is role playing. And because the rp was ten/ten ii, we tried getting to that point a little bit quicker... x]

But yeah, thanks for reading! :]

yeah, thing is... darkdragondee March 16 2009, 16:37:45 UTC

actually, the thing about the mood...well, that's how the doctor is, isn't it? moods never last for long. like bipolar disorder crushed to moments, not days and weeks. that's part of what i love about him!

. darkdragondee March 16 2009, 16:39:40 UTC

oh yeah, and btw, loving the story! can't wait for the promised NC_17 bits!

leviathans_moon February 17 2009, 12:57:15 UTC

totally loving the zoologs. so cute^_^
I agree with the comment above, with the mood-changing and everything, and it feels like you're repeating a lot of the thoughts, but that is roleplaying for you, I know what you mean, did it myself ones, and it came out sort of the same, so don't worry about it too much. otherwise just a few spelling mistakes which always disturb the fluidity of my reading a bit, but I'll survive^_^ I really like it so far, the interaction between the two, and I'm ready to read more.