Fic: Behind Closed Doors; Being Human; Mitchell/Annie; 1/1

[shootingstars88]

Hello! So I'm not dead, just writing about characters that are.

Title: Behind Closed Doors
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Comments

[wicked_plum7]

So lovely, So Annie & Mitchell, and just what I needed!

[shootingstars88]

Thank you for commenting! I'm glad you enjoyed :)

[afigureofspeech]

I almost skipped this but then I decided not to and I am so glad I did!

First of all, I love the overall message of this little fic. Mitchell is in a dark place, and has been for a while; Annie helps to show him the silver lining. :) I especially loved the bit where Annie told him about her own doors, it's very creative. Your banter between them feels very organic and lovely too.

Second, you have some absolutely fantastic lines in here. I especially loved:

When reality settles in, he’s actually a little disappointed in his subconscious. As nightmares go, the doors were getting a bit predictable. Josie was cruel though. His mind is vicious like that.

“I think if I could sleep I’d only ever have nightmares.”

Annie’s skin is cool but everywhere she’s touching him feels warmer than he has in years.And many more but if I quote them all this review will be as long as the fic lol

[shootingstars88]

Thanks so much for taking the time to leave such a lovely and detailed review. I'm really glad you liked this and it's always nice to hear specifically which parts worked.

Re: the commas. Thanks for that, really. I have this thing where I use commas like there's no tomorrow. I throw them in all over the place then I have to go through and take a load out Sometimes I think I overdo in the other direction and remove slightly too many so it's something to keep an eye on.

[afigureofspeech]

Lol I'm taking a Creative Writing class right now, and we're doing workshops. That's pretty much what I had in mind when I commented. Plus, I know I always love to hear feedback, so other people probably like it too! x)

I have the exact same problem with commas. Either I have too many or I hold back too much and there are too few. It's the way things sound in my head though. x)

[shootingstars88]

Thanks very much, I'm so glad you enjoyed!

I'm probably going to write more, this pairing is too tempting.

[madhowan]

I've been looking for a fic like this for a while, so thank you! It sounds just like them -- especially Annie. You've got the way she pretends to be cheery until the cracking point, and the really heartbreaking stuff, like her doors leading to nothing at all, and this:

“You can tell me you know. I think...” she hesitates and just for a moment she looks impossibly sad. “I think if I could sleep I’d only ever have nightmares.”

But then they help each other out. Yay! I love the whole thing ♥ :)

[shootingstars88]

Eep thanks so much :) Glad you liked it and that the characterisation worked for you because I haven't written anything for these two in about 2 years so I was a bit worried.

Also, HI! I haven't disappeared or died or anything, now would be a good time to mention that. I am reading my flist every day but mostly I read it on my iphone which makes commenting pretty difficult. So I apologise for being crap, but I promise I am still here!

[madhowan]

You are not crap! We all have to have a proper life outside of the internet, alas. ;)

[thesinginggirl]

Beautiful beautiful beautiful beautiful beautiful! And a bit more beautiful!

Y'know, I was going to tag on something that was actually coherent, but the above says it all. Beautiful.

[shootingstars88]

Thanks so much :) I'm glad you enjoyed.