Wow! I like this a lot. I mean, I usually like the things you post here, at least sort of like them. But this is particularly good. A little rough at times, maybe. But, what poem isn't in the beginning? I know all of mine are.
So, I won't sit here and try to expound your words. I'm not going to give you a critique. But I'll say that I like what your doing with it. Recognizing and capturing the symbolism that exists all around us is always a beautiful endeavor. And it works in layers. I like that. And it is revealed, shedding a cloak slowly. I like that subtlety and mystery.
It just occurred to me that you haven't posted here in awhile. So, thanks for posting something.
Haha, first of all, don't thank me for posting something. I blame myself for waiting this long to write something substantial enough to post here. I went to get tea and there were no seats, so I sat in my car to drink it. There was this tree right in front of me, and I couldn't help but analyze it. It was so perfect. But still, thank you for thanking me. And for reading it. :)
And I went to the beach and wrote there today too. It was so peaceful, calm, and quiet... it was an amazing therapy for me. Things have been so stressful and that is the key place to let all of that go, just for a little while. Afterwards, I went to the right down the road there and took pictures of that big open field. It was all so beautiful. What a good day I had. I just felt like telling you about it.
You said your instead of you're in the second paragraph!!!
Well, I can't help but be thankful for such things. So, you're welcome for the thank you. :P
The beach can be quite theraputic, especially this time of year when it is mostly vacant. During the summer... I don't know. It's a little too hectic to offer any solace during the day. But, anyway, glad you had a nice day relieving your stress at the beach.
And....fuck. I did. Thanks for letting me know. NOT. ;P
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So, I won't sit here and try to expound your words. I'm not going to give you a critique. But I'll say that I like what your doing with it. Recognizing and capturing the symbolism that exists all around us is always a beautiful endeavor. And it works in layers. I like that. And it is revealed, shedding a cloak slowly. I like that subtlety and mystery.
It just occurred to me that you haven't posted here in awhile. So, thanks for posting something.
:)
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And I went to the beach and wrote there today too. It was so peaceful, calm, and quiet... it was an amazing therapy for me. Things have been so stressful and that is the key place to let all of that go, just for a little while. Afterwards, I went to the right down the road there and took pictures of that big open field. It was all so beautiful. What a good day I had. I just felt like telling you about it.
You said your instead of you're in the second paragraph!!!
Again, thank you.
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The beach can be quite theraputic, especially this time of year when it is mostly vacant. During the summer... I don't know. It's a little too hectic to offer any solace during the day. But, anyway, glad you had a nice day relieving your stress at the beach.
And....fuck. I did. Thanks for letting me know. NOT. ;P
And PS... your comment space is all fucked up.
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