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TWW FIC: Five Words (December Twenty-Fourth)

Dec 22, 2010 17:23

Title: Five Words (December Twenty-Fourth)
Author: shutterbug_12
Characters: Josh/Donna (cameo by Cliff)
Rating: PG
Disclaimer: Only borrowing. Make love, not lawsuits.
Summary: She'd lied under oath to keep this secret.
Author's Note: War Crimes backstory/missing scene; references In Excelsis Deo. 415 words. Thank you so much to my beta readers: magisterequitum and earlwyn. ( Read more... )

tww, josh/donna

Comments 37

intrigueing December 23 2010, 01:49:24 UTC

Such an absolutely perfect story, with such an absolutely perfect five words. I usually hate stories that pretend to know what Josh wrote in the book - I always felt like it was something so intensely private I didn't want to intrude on their secret and know, even though the characters are fictional. But the way you did it here, with just a couple fragments of what he wrote, is perfect. Great, sweet story.

shutterbug_12 December 23 2010, 03:40:11 UTC

Wow. Wow, thank you. I'm so happy to hear all this.

I think it's definitely a private note (and I've never read other stories that tackled the contents of his note), but I couldn't help but try to puzzle out what it might be about. Not necessarily the words, because I think it would read very--hmm--contrived, I guess, if someone tried to write out the entire note. But based on his character, and the fact that one of his things is his fear of losing people important to him, and his seriousness in response to Donna's "skis would have killed you" sent up hints for me. I couldn't imagine that it would be something he'd enable--the skiing--because of the dangerous nature of it, and that concept was the only idea that has ever made sense in my head. So. I am thrilled that the way it was presented in fragments--just to get at the basic idea of it--worked really well for you. And am equally thrilled that it was believable. Thank you for that comment. And thank you for reading! I'm very glad you liked it.

tosca1390 December 23 2010, 02:39:59 UTC

As she faced forward, her chest twisted with a frayed, sharp knot of shame.

Whoosh. You can see that on her face at the end of that episode. Whoosh. Nicely done.

shutterbug_12 December 23 2010, 03:45:21 UTC

Whoosh. Is that your "man, that knocked me over, guh" sound? Not sure how to interpret that one. ;)

But seriously, thank you. ♥ The look on her face always slayed me, how remorseful and ashamed she looked about the whole situation. So I'm pleased that it translated well here. Thanks for reading and leaving the nice comment, hon. Always, always appreciated.

amy_119 December 23 2010, 03:08:30 UTC

Oh, wow. I love this. Absolutely love it. This is the first story that I've ever read that tries to describe what Josh wrote, and I think you did it really, really well. <3

shutterbug_12 December 23 2010, 03:48:38 UTC

Thank you! Apparently there are a number of stories out there that try to tackle it. I haven't read any, either. But! I'm very pleased you liked it. That idea of the note, with his fear of losing people important to him, was the only concept that really made sense in my head. Glad it worked so well for you and others. That really does thrill the pants off me. Right off. Voom. ♥

amy_119 December 23 2010, 03:49:58 UTC

Oh my. That's saucy. ;)

shutterbug_12 December 23 2010, 03:52:34 UTC

*snicker* I'm. Too sexy for my pants. Too sexy for my pants...

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shutterbug_12 December 25 2010, 14:58:47 UTC

Aww. That's so nice to hear. Thank you so much. (I was really happy with it myself. It's been a while since I've been this pleased about something I wrote. I mean, I don't post anything I'm unhappy with, but I was really proud of this one. There's about five to eight fics I feel that way about, and this is definitely one of them.) So I'm so thrilled that you liked it. Thanks so much for reading and the wonderful comment. ♥

parapraxis04 December 23 2010, 06:40:31 UTC

Not only is the story absolutely lovely, I also agree that this is the best "what was the inscription" idea I've seen. So many are too sappy, too obvious, but this one just seems very... Josh. I think I may have to go re-watch some episodes now. :)

shutterbug_12 December 25 2010, 15:09:19 UTC

Aw, thank you so much. ♥

I'm especially happy that you liked the fragments of Josh's note. With his fear of losing people important to him, and his seriousness in response to Donna's "skis would have killed you", the basic idea of the note was one that made a lot of sense in my head. So I'm very glad you liked that. Thanks so much for reading and the lovely comment!