Comments | shutup_and_eat: another fanfic, not as cool as before

myradi in shutup_and_eat

another fanfic, not as cool as before

Sep 02, 2007 01:26

Title: From Real Love
Fandom: Jet Set Radio Future
Pairing: Beat/Yoyo, mentions to Beat/Gum
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: substance abuse, strong language
Summary: For Beat, life was all about taking risks. But when you grow up, you can't always live such a care-free life. So he plays it safe and loses the most precious thing in the universe.
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piogge September 2 2007, 08:36:29 UTC

Ohhh...love, that was so beautiful. I adore the cliches added to this in respects to 'real love' has a bit of irony to it, as people view 'real love' differently. However, it was amazing and I adored it. ♥

Bunches of love, as always~

myradi September 2 2007, 09:06:51 UTC

awww, thanks, love! ♥ my real beef with this is that it just doesn't feel powerful at all to me. like my last one really struck a chord with me when I re-read it, but this one just feels kinda empty. but like I said, I donno. xD

but I do agree that the "From Real Love" idea was pretty cute. I just wish I coulda executed it a little better......

telluryan September 2 2007, 15:34:06 UTC

I thought it was great ;______; the imagery was really strong, and I love how you make use of all the senses in your stories. It was very sad, heart-wrenching...to me, it was very easy to get into, and I loved it from the start. I think my heart broke a little at the end, too.

You're truly a brilliant writer. I was so excited when I saw that you'd posted another fic.

myradi September 2 2007, 20:46:56 UTC

♥ you're gonna inflate my ego! be careful! ^3^ but yeah, this fic actually gave me some trouble, just because my Beat-muse isn't as powerful as my Yoyo-muse in certain areas. Like, it sort of comes naturally for me to write what Yoyo's feelings, because I just imagine him to be a very expressive boy. But when it comes to Beat, he's so laid-back to the point that I almost can't get a good read on him.

it's funny because this story was supposed to have a happier end, but when I got down to it, I saw that this was really the only way. I may do an alternate ending someday, just to see if I can, but for now, I think it's better this way. ♥