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[sic_re_vera]

Title: Look, Don't Touch [part 1]
Author: Myself, Kendra, sic_re_vera
Rating: PG (for mild violence)
Notes: I took liberties with Doumeki and Watanuki’s pasts. I took liberties with the magical laws that rule xxxholic-verse. I took liberties with the perspective I was writing for. I took a lot of liberties in general, but against all odds the finished

Comments

[tommyrotter]

Such pretty pretty words...hehe. I love you for doing Ballistic!Doumeki! yay! =D

I'm glad I pulled you farther into this fandom...hehehe!

Love!

[sic_re_vera]

=) as you should

I'm glad you pulled me farther into this fandom too

[soujiokita]

I think my comments started lacking originality a long time ago because I can't think of anything else to say other than:

I love you. It was totally awesome. Write more.

...which is what everyone else said... So this comment really has no point other than to take up space on the page.

[sic_re_vera]

No, this comment is special because it's from wonderful you. <3

[soujiokita]

I'm not wonderful...

... but your writing is.

Hah! A touch of originality there... Or maybe I'm just lying to myself

[traincat]

Wonderful. Just purely wonderful. You must write more. Soon.

*grovels at your feet*

[sic_re_vera]

Ah! Groveling! =)

All of the positive feedback is encouraging me to work on the next part more quickly than I normally would. Thank you.

[jaaku_san]

This is great :D You simply must write more(an explanation for what just happened and why would also be nice XD)

[sic_re_vera]

I rarely write things with plot, and thus is my attempt to withhold certain bits of info until later chapters, but don't worry, I am going to have reasons for everything. Or I'll try, anyway.

Thank you!

[jaaku_san]

Aaaa.....the infamous PWP. Reasons are always a good thing to have :D But randomness can be fun too XD

[ii_hanashi]

Nice. I really like this. Your writing is very pretty, very prose-y, and it comes off very well. I also liked how you set this up; I was intrigued at the first sentence. ^_^

My only problem is that sometimes it felt too wordy, and some of the more redundant adjectives or descriptions could have been shortened or left out entirely, and it would have flowed even better, and then I would have expired from glee. But I really liked this and I can't wait for the second part. ^_^

[sic_re_vera]

thank you, and thanks for the criticism, I really desperately need it. I'll try to keep it in mind next time, as I have realized before that sometimes I might get too wordy.