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[julia_skittles]

 
Title- Cure

Rating- PG

prompt- 104, writers choice.

Summary- JD has hiccups, everyone tries to cure him.

Warning-Very minor jd/cox slash(just a kiss)

pairing- JD/cox, but can be taken as non-slash as well.

authors note- This is my first fic ever, so if its not good, im sorry.

since it is my first fic, i would love some concrit so i can get better at fic

Comments

[kleimo91]

a) That was really cute
b) Could you kindly check the spelling? Please...
c) I'm not sure, but I think sick_scrubs wants the fics to be in some kind of order. How abot Prompt 31. Writers Choice? Just look at the other posts.
d) My tipp for hickup: Think about the things you ate the day/week before. :) Helps! ^^

[julia_skittles]

a) Thank you :)
b.) i did, but i guess not very well, ill check it again
c.) k, im new , so thanks for helping me! :D
d.) maybe ill try that next time i have them :)

[nighthawkms]

Hrm, interesting. A few notes:

1. Grammar. Your tenses seem to switch up a lot, you should keep them in a singular tense that depends on how you want to present this.

2. Capitalizing a lot of random words and not capitalizing names. Made it a lot harder to read this.

3. Missing punctuation in a few places.

4. Missing spaces between a few words.

I like the concept you've got here; you just have to tinker with getting all the grammatical/compositional things together. You should get someone to read your stories over before posting, it really helps out! I'm anal retentive about getting betas for my stuff, but you don't have to be - just a quick checker is nice! :) If you ever need someone to do a read-over, I'd be happy to ^_^

[julia_skittles]

oh,thanks alot! i'll make sure to get a beta next time, thanks for the advice :)

[serpent_mage]

This was really funny! I particularly liked the end when Dr. Cox did that special grin.

Also, just to put my two cents in, don't you mean horizontal instead of vertical in the last sentence?

[julia_skittles]

thanks! i really appreciate that :)

OMG! how did i miss that! i'll fix it right now, thanks so much for telling me! ^/////^

[julia_skittles]

fixed it! >w

[serpent_mage]

Happy to have helped!

[damato019]

I really liked this one shot. It was funny and cute. ^^
I hope you write more jd/cox fics. I would definitely read them. *grin*

[selimnagisokrov]

This is great.

((The trick to get rid of hiccups: Just say "two old guys going at it". Oddly enough...it always seems to work...for me...and others...))