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Feels Like Forever, Part Two

Apr 18, 2014 20:27

FEELS LIKE FOREVER, PART TWO

Ennis led the way out of the garage, not saying anything to his friends who were mostly shit-faced and would never know or care that he was gone unless he brought it to their attention. Something about the way Jack had looked at him had sent an odd quiver of hopeful lust shimmering through him, and so he wanted to get ( Read more... )

feels like forever, dsp

Comments 19

argentine65 April 19 2014, 20:26:08 UTC

This is such a tender, romantic and sweet story. Thank you, Jane, for sharing. Martha

sienata April 20 2014, 04:22:19 UTC

i'm not sure what age group i'm shooting for here, but i'm thinking maybe younger people??? i'm not sure. anyway, i think this story would work for young or more mature readers. it's got a little bit of everything. i'm glad you enjoyed it. thanks for the comment. :)

lougenessis April 19 2014, 21:45:58 UTC

Another winner! I love your writing. Thanks again.

sienata April 20 2014, 04:22:38 UTC

thanks so much!!

dclittledarlin April 20 2014, 01:24:25 UTC

LOVE it!! Forgot to leave comment on part I, was in too big of a hurry to get to part II!! It's very sweet and sexy and SO glad we didn't have to wait for sex :-) When do we get more?
xxxooo LM

sienata April 20 2014, 04:24:18 UTC

this is a ONE SHOT! no more. sorry. if there was gonna be more, you woulda had to wait for sex!
this is it. i'm glad you liked it. :)

dclittledarlin April 20 2014, 07:00:31 UTC

Obviously I glazed over when I saw word count req from DSP and didn't out 2 n 2 together to realize it was a one shot :-( I was wondering why got sex so fast LOL It was great, always love to spend time with the boys!

tmn1966 April 20 2014, 21:41:01 UTC

I really enjoyed reading this. It was a quick read, but very satisfying. I like how both boys were eager to break free from the parents, to try life on their own. I really liked that Ennis was tired of pretending - didn't want to live a lie with a girlfriend he didn't want. I also liked how you were able to convey how much thought both boys had put into things, especially for Ennis. Jack was a little different because I think he was more accepting that he wasn't going to think about the possibility of being gay until Ennis came along. I thought it was awesome that he busted through the door that Ennis had cracked open and was the one to kiss Ennis. I like that Jack was the one to make that move. And, of course, I love that the ending was hopeful.

A great read!! :)

joetheone May 29 2014, 01:31:27 UTC

This was just wonderful I love the story I can remember bits and pieces of it from previously and I think you did a wonderful job of editing and I think you did a fantastic job of giving us a happy night together on the lake I look forward to more from you and I'm sorry that it's taking me so long to get caught up in reading but it was worthwhile and I'm very very happy thank you Joe

sienata May 30 2014, 17:35:14 UTC

hey there! i'm so glad to be getting comments from you again. i hope your eyes are doing better. eyesight is so precious. my mom has macular degeneration but she gets a shot and takes meds and her eyesight is hanging in there. it's not as good as it once was but she can still see to read and drive, etc.

i submitted this story for a DSP "first time" anthology. it didn't get selected but they liked it and asked me to expand it a few thousand words for a novella-length story. i'm going to do that, i suppose, since i'd love to get something published again. this story is the closest thing i have to making that happen. i'm thinking of redoing the opening of the story and instead of telling about their past, writing it. we'll see how that goes. i'm on vakay now with my mom so not much thoughts are happening beyond eating and having fun.

take care!! big hugs. jane