salvation

Feb 28, 2005 21:02

hold my hand in this world of misery ( Read more... )

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nyxa March 2 2005, 23:42:51 UTC
I hate poetry. I just don't like it. I hate having to read something and fight to understand its "underlying meaning" and all that bull just to enjoy it.

That said, I liked this, sort of. I like the style, and I like the flow, except for one teeny little part:

rain melts like flowers into your eyes the
blood flows like candy in a river I think the 'the' should be pushed down to the next line, just for flow reasons.

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