i think i liked this poem more after i read it over a few times and thought about it. at the same time, however, i think it lacks flow somewhat. it's probably all the ellipses...i dunno, that's just a personal preference for me. ellipses are good in moderation if they fit the mood and whatnot, but if you use them constantly, they use their meaning. it's probably the same for pretty much anything.
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