No Man's Child - Chapter 45

Jul 08, 2007 15:01

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edoraslass July 28 2007, 17:55:25 UTC
I've been amazing crap at commenting lately - I can't seem to get my head to focus on it! I'll come back, when I can go into more detail, but let me say that I absolutely love the sense of urgency and danger throughout this chapter - I find that sometimes it's very hard to sustain these kinds of emotions without feeling like it's turning out overaught and melodramatic, but you've done a bang-up job. It all just flies along at breakneck speed, and it's really, really effective.

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sillimarilli July 30 2007, 03:12:42 UTC
I find that sometimes it's very hard to sustain these kinds of emotions without feeling like it's turning out overaught and melodramatic

LOL! Yes, rather like slapping exclamation points on everyday statements. Everything is sooo intense and fraught with meaning, when really we're just talking about where to go eat. *snork* It took me a long time to wrap my brain around how to create suspense and urgency in the reader. "No... threatening grain is just not going to generate sympathy, Silli."

Thanks EL. I'm glad you liked it and it worked out.

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