Oh Lord, the imagery! Your descriptive style is so intricate! In each and every sentence there is spine-tingling detail of which I haven't really encountered before. You've kept the emotions perfectly in check and the characters in character as well as more believable than most. It's so close to perfect. I adore it, this will be going straight into my memories. :D
ehehehe, thank you! <3 I love writing detail, it's so easy to lose myself in it and write for hours....but then I have to remind myself that writing a million paragraphs on something as simple as "Naruto handed Sasuke the mug of hot chocolate" will result in a VERY slow and drawn-out story, so I suppose it's a matter of finding a balance between the speed of the fic and how descriptive I want to get....XD
Thanks for reading! *blushes* I feel so honored....<3
I know how you feel, however my descriptive skills are far below your own. I adore slow and drawn out stories. They make even the smallest moments significant. I have a little theory that it's always the moments in between the large scenes that a person will remember the best. Either way you have, for me at least, found a balance. :)
d'awwwwww......*huggles* I suppose it just comes with practice, and LOTS AND LOTS AND LOTS of reading. ^_^
*grins* thankssss...<3 *blushes* I'd like to think I can possibly balance it a little bit more, though, especially with long, multi-chap fics...D: It's fun to be in the moment, but if you're in the moment for too long, the story doesn't flow too well....XD I've been writing a lot of short stories so far, but I'm going to try my hand at a multi-chap fic again soon, just to see how it turns out.
*tackles* WAH! This was awesome and so unbelieveably intense! I didn't realize just how much I missed your writing until I read this!
I want to feel sorry for Sasuke. Torture is bad for anyone, breaking someone's mind is just bad. But....I think he deserves it. He needs to be broken down so he can finally let go of all the angst and BS he feeds himself so that he can pretend he's on some righteous quest for vengeance.
You portrayed Naruto amazingly as always. You managed to show his depth of caring and at the same time show just how vulnerable he is no matter how much he tries to hide. it.
Amazing story. Your details of the torture and their effects on Sasuke mind were epic and totally painted disturbing pictures in my head.
Awwwwww, I probably missed writing a lot more than anything else! <3 I need to make more free time for myself so that I can write more, if only for about ten minutes or so....XD
Yeah, I sort of feel sorry for Sasuke too, but you're right, he does deserve it in a way. He seems capable of handling himself; after all, he's been through worse, so I doubt this sort of interrogation was executed in a way to break him; they just wanted information from him that he may or may not have been willing to give. XD
Naruto's my favorite character to write, actually. <3 He has a very malleable personality that works well in giving the story a lighthearted feel or a serious twist (because he does have his moments of maturity, rare as they are XD so I kind of like to emphasize those moments since they're so few and far between), and he's so fun to play around with because of his spontaneity...<3 Isen from Unholy Graveyard would be a close second, though....<3
eeeeee, I love you too, dear! <3 *huggles* it's so good to be
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Your descriptive style is so intricate! In each and every sentence there is spine-tingling detail of which I haven't really encountered before. You've kept the emotions perfectly in check and the characters in character as well as more believable than most. It's so close to perfect. I adore it, this will be going straight into my memories. :D
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Thanks for reading! *blushes* I feel so honored....<3
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*grins* thankssss...<3 *blushes* I'd like to think I can possibly balance it a little bit more, though, especially with long, multi-chap fics...D: It's fun to be in the moment, but if you're in the moment for too long, the story doesn't flow too well....XD I've been writing a lot of short stories so far, but I'm going to try my hand at a multi-chap fic again soon, just to see how it turns out.
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This is good, very well done, to. I liked it.
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I want to feel sorry for Sasuke. Torture is bad for anyone, breaking someone's mind is just bad. But....I think he deserves it. He needs to be broken down so he can finally let go of all the angst and BS he feeds himself so that he can pretend he's on some righteous quest for vengeance.
You portrayed Naruto amazingly as always. You managed to show his depth of caring and at the same time show just how vulnerable he is no matter how much he tries to hide. it.
Amazing story. Your details of the torture and their effects on Sasuke mind were epic and totally painted disturbing pictures in my head.
*sigh* I do so love your writing.
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Awwwwww, I probably missed writing a lot more than anything else! <3 I need to make more free time for myself so that I can write more, if only for about ten minutes or so....XD
Yeah, I sort of feel sorry for Sasuke too, but you're right, he does deserve it in a way. He seems capable of handling himself; after all, he's been through worse, so I doubt this sort of interrogation was executed in a way to break him; they just wanted information from him that he may or may not have been willing to give. XD
Naruto's my favorite character to write, actually. <3 He has a very malleable personality that works well in giving the story a lighthearted feel or a serious twist (because he does have his moments of maturity, rare as they are XD so I kind of like to emphasize those moments since they're so few and far between), and he's so fun to play around with because of his spontaneity...<3 Isen from Unholy Graveyard would be a close second, though....<3
eeeeee, I love you too, dear! <3 *huggles* it's so good to be
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