"These Thoughts"
oh dearest,
these thoughts of you,
will be the death of me.
running through my mind.
one after another,
it’s a cycle,
neither ending nor beginning.
seducing my heart,
breaking it apart.
torturing my soul,
to only appease beyond belief.
changing into another kind,
each and everyone,
it is never ending,
never stopping or ever starting.
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these thoughts of you,
will be the death of me.
running through my mind.
one after another,
it’s a cycle,
neither ending nor beginning.
seducing my heart,
breaking it apart.
torturing my soul,
to only appease beyond belief.
changing into another kind,
each and everyone,
it is never ending,
never stopping or ever starting.
my ( Read more... )
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Hey^ ^!
I like how the last three stanzas taste- mystery, passion, slight cynicism.
"my hopes, dreams and aspirations,
they all become pleasant transactions.
my fears, lies and nightmares,
are all one perfect dare."
"and i won't ever be (the) same again
I won't tell if you won't"
"he was you he was me" is the most interesting line but I was most into the softstep tightrope careening between light and darkness in the last three stanzas which create windows and life.
Passion, and tension, are definitely some of your strengths.
It's Sunday, which means I'll be writing and I'll post in the next couple days- let me know what you think, cheers=)
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you've been really helpful in my poetry writing-ness. thanks!
"he was you, he was me" yeah its my favorite ironic icon lol!
and sure lemme know when you post, i'll be glad to read it. yay lol.
i wrote some too but it wasnt my best, and idk if anyone would like it.
laters =]
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