Wistful Waters

[similiesslip]

I hunger for the sea

Comments

[jacq22]

Beautiful, and I love the sea too, it appears in my writing often. Your fabulous description had me from the first look at ther sea. Love like that is enduring.

[similiesslip]

The ocean will always be there waiting for me (or at least I like to think so)

Do you get to visit the ocean very often? And I have meant to tell you, I LOVE that shade of blue you are wearing in your icon!

[similiesslip]

I envy you for living by the water. I hope you enjoy every moment of it!

I'm glad you can appreciate and understand how I feel about the ocean.

Thanks for commenting!

[shimmerdream]

Ooh, this is a gorgeous entry, especially the "star spattered night" line.

[similiesslip]

Thanks. When I hit that phrase I was like "perfect!" but then again, the parts I like are not always the parts others enjoy so I'm really glad to know you liked it:)

[whipchick]

I love the contrasts you draw between how you felt outside the water and in it, and your description of the happiness near the ocean - I'd never thought of it that way! I like how you describe your emotions in terms of the physical feelings and visual observations.

If you're interested in a piece of concrit, I wonder if it would add more texture to put in one small, quick detail of what Matt did that bothered you? On one hand, he's not the point, on the other hand, all your other descriptions are so specific that he almost becomes a red herring when he appears as an obstacle with no details to resolve him and move on?

The contrast between your younger shyness and the love you felt from the ocean is so beautifully drawn!

[similiesslip]

You really made a good point. I just changed the beginning part about why Matt bothered me.

Looking back at it with a (now) adult's eyes..he wasn't horrible. He probably just wanted attention and was looking for laughs. I was way too sensitive though and his joking hurt me a lot. I've always felt "different" from others but hoped others didn't notice. The way he would highlight how I didn't fit in really bugged me.

I appreciate the idea. Hopefully my changes makes the entry better.

Thanks!

[whipchick]

Totally works - wraps up Matt in a way that I can ignore him as the younger you learns to, which is a cool little element!

[basric]

I grew up in Cocoa Beach, Florida so I truly understand the love of the ocean. I debated with myself a long long time about becoming an oceanographer but my mother talked me into staying near home so it was Nursing instead.

[similiesslip]

Well I can tell you are a good nurse. I guess we all have dreams not taken. Nursing was actually my first college major back in 1996.

Thanks for commenting!