The Color Twelve

[sinnesspiele]

Word Count: 499

Warnings: None

Me?  A minion?  How insulting!

No, my sadly mistaken friend, I am much more than some witch’s trained flying primate.  I am a henchman.  I am the support structure - the buttress, if you will - to greatness.  Without my sacrifice and effort, there would be no super villain, which in turn means there would be no need for

Comments

[yuunaluna]

definitely had a few laugh out loud moments with this one! one nitpick though: the voice of your character is very close to the voice you used last week. just something to look out for in your upcoming entries. give your characters the credit they deserve, and really develop different voices for each of them! but again, super witty. really enjoyable read. definitely have my vote for this week!

[sinnesspiele]

Thank you for reading. I do not find your critique very applicable, but thank you for offering it regardless.

[unnameduntamed]

Totally believable character and an awesome ending. Brilliant.
Good luck!

[belluminabyssus]

Very funny! I'm glad somebody decided to take on humour this week. I think that my favourite thing about this piece (as bizarre as this may sound) is your names. Golden Aarrow, Mount Hellfire, Lord Hubrisis (and his real name), Crimson Baron -- they're all great. I think that's one of the hardest things to do in a superhero/villain story, since so many names can sound cheesy or stupid. But you've very much succeeded with that here!

However, I, like yuunaluna and thorarosebird find that after last week's hero piece, your voices are unnervingly similar. It's the same tone, same exact style, same philosophical edge. It's certainly more humorous, and the intent behind it is different, but I felt a little weird after reading this: like it could have been the same character. I would try developing different voices and different styles. Otherwise you could come off as a one-trick pony, which I'm sure you are not.

In general, great job! I greatly enjoyed reading it, and I loved the way you took on the prompt. :]

[aquarius_galuxy]

XD I love the irony in here! The henchman trying so hard to defend his good name, and then he gos and blows things up! It makes me wonder what happened to him/her after the monologue!

I'd say that the sentences are maybe a tad too long for something spoken aloud, but that's just me. =p

thanks for the read, I enjoyed it!

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[belager]

Hi, I'm your editor for this week. You requested no holds barred without grammar, so here I go