Sometimes I can be kind of poetic

[sinnomine]

When all of this world will be red and pink
Then the lonely will feel all a'mimsy
Tattoos of names in indelible ink
On a heart that remains rather flimsy

Still need to finish this dumb Valentine's Day poem. >_

Comments

[fagivore]

I may have an idea for how you can finish it:

in the 1st line, you imply that the world is in love1
in the 2nd line, you imply that people without love are being left out2
in the 3rd line, you imply that someone is permanently a part of you3
in the 4th line, you imply that your heart is weak4

So Congrats! Your intro is already written, you've already gotten past the hardest part.

Now, take 1 and use that idea as the controlling idea of your first non-introductory verse.
Then take 2 and use that idea as the controlling idea of your second non-introductory verse, etc.
When you do the conclusion, flip the intro upside-down and make the ideas in each line go from 4-1 instead of 1-4.

Hey, it's just an outline. You don't have to use it or anything. But if you do, it will be in perfect sequence.
AND it'll be 6 verses long.
And that'll look fucking impressive as fuck.

[fagivore]

Don't think i'm weird. Poetic analysis IS my kryptonite because poetry is the only thing I really have passion for.