My First Tim/Tony???

[sirenskywalker]

I've been reading NCIS slash for a little while. Honestly i'm fairly ne wto the fandom yself and while i'm a major NCIS fan i've not written fanfiction in... well quite a while. erm... here's just a snippet of something thats been rolling about in my head.

Eyes on screen, focus, breathe, in out repeat. Don’t look, don’t turn do not attempt to see

Comments

[ex_hellesof]

Okay, I like this beginning. Definitely grabbed my interest. I would be happy to audience and even try my hand at betaing for you if you'd like. PM me if your interested.

[wingstar102]

Oh my! That was unreal kind of tense. Loved it! If you'll excuse me, this fic made me fangirl all over myself. :)

Love and cherries,
Wingstar

^^

[sirenskywalker]

Thanks so much. I'm so glad you enjoyed it!! I hope to have more out soon.

[jack_infinitude]

HA so I left a comment on your post at kissmeprobie, but I don't if you would see it there...point is, I'd be happy to lend a hand. (check my comment at your comm post for my public email address.) There are some minor (minor!) grammar and spelling issues with this little piece, but I think there's a lot of potential.

[sirenskywalker]

^^ thanks for the interest ^^ perhaps i'll send some things to you in the future ^^ *grins* dunno how quickly i'm going to be able to get this out but i hope to have more up soon *fingers crossed*

[write_in_red]

Ohh! Nice. I'm pretty excited about it. :) Tony's inner monologue was attention grabbing. What made me want to keep reading was the line, "The age old truth laid before him by his mother rang true once more. Humans were not to be trusted. They were irrational, volatile and without honor. In the end a friendship would afford on of his kind companionship, but never peace. Love, well that was simply out of the equation. Not even to be addressed, thought about, or risked,"~made me want to find out what exactly Tony is...and why is here in the first place? What's going on with our favorite playboy?

Looking forward to more. :)