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Aug 26, 2005 14:34

Deep inside there beams ( Read more... )

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marinz August 26 2005, 18:29:41 UTC
awww :)

Opening lines were awesome!
"Deep inside there beams
A closet, bright white
But darker than it seems"

I love the wording and the expressions and the imagery. Not cliché, very original, imaginative.

"sex, lies, and rainbows"..interesting combination.

and oh my god do I love this part!:
"i know just what you are
a favorite mix cd
in my car stereo
songs so good they
make me forget i have a radio
songs of memories
local music, coffee shop quality
but now you're more like
a scratched up mix cd
i found in my glove compartment
where the worst song is on repeat
i throw it out the window of my apartment
but you know i pick it up on the street
i've already tried throwing you away"

Awesome.

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sirfogs August 26 2005, 20:37:04 UTC
hey thanks! i love how you tell me just what you like, very very cool. btw i use AIM and my sn is fogarty27 so feel free to chat me up... talk to you soon.

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marinz August 26 2005, 20:58:09 UTC
you're very welcome :)
And cool, I look forwarding to talking with ya soon ;)

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