Comments | sky_pie: Challenge 07/LB

bossymarmalade in sky_pie

Challenge 07/LB - maggie

Jun 22, 2008 20:39

I wanted to give this challenge a go before time ran out! It's to yummy to pass up.

( cut for ... well ... explicitness )

lb, 07

Comments 7

kira_j June 23 2008, 10:58:07 UTC

first of all: HOT. secondly, i find it super interesting that i can't tell how puzzled justin is by chris's annoyance. i liked the rolling around idea, i'm not sure if that was a metaphor for the power balance shifting/how they change roles? i loved how even at the end i was still not sure if justin knew what triggered chris's snippiness or whether he even cared. it wasn't angsty because justin's not worried, his reaction lets us know he knows everything is cool because he's assured he knows what's going on. i really liked this, also: hot!

bossymarmalade June 25 2008, 04:56:12 UTC

i liked the rolling around idea, i'm not sure if that was a metaphor for the power balance shifting/how they change roles?

Yay! I definitely wanted to get that across, and also Chris's need for Justin to take more of an active role.

i was still not sure if justin knew what triggered chris's snippiness or whether he even cared

Also hurrah, because I totally was trying to show how Justin's so comfortable in being with Chris, so secure with him, that he just rolls with Chris's moods as being normal (maybe even when he shouldn't and they're not). I also really liked in Topaz's original fic how Chris was worried that Justin was only with him because he was too bored or lazy to go find somebody else, so I wanted to play with that a bit.

Thank you for the feedback; it was very informative! Also, am glad you found it hot, because HOMG TIMBERTRICK ASDFASLKDFSH. heee!

pensnest August 16 2008, 14:34:39 UTC

You have a little rollercoaster of emotions going on there, or something... Justin just going with the flow and Chris doing his best to be *there*. Yummy.

bossymarmalade August 16 2008, 17:34:06 UTC

Thank you! Rollercoaster-y is pretty much exactly what I was going for, so I'm happy to hear it came off that way.

musicboxgirl August 16 2008, 18:30:32 UTC

Um yes. Yes yes.

I loved how Justin just kind of went with it and Chris was frustrated but *yawn* hehe

Very well done!

bossymarmalade August 17 2008, 19:49:38 UTC

Aw, thank you so much! I'm glad it worked for you. *g*

rikes August 17 2008, 22:10:37 UTC

That's so delicious!