Comments | sleep_not: Life on Mars fic; 2006 was Lonely; R-rated

sleep_not

Life on Mars fic; 2006 was Lonely; R-rated

Nov 01, 2010 12:44

As previously mentioned, I signed up for the Porntober Bingo challenge over on lifein1973. That's my bingo card below (BWAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!). Here's the first entry for 'Alone' posted in, ahem, Pervember rather than Porntober, but it's the thought that counts.

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life on mars, fic

Comments 7

chamekke November 1 2010, 15:08:58 UTC

*is speechless for a few minutes* This is fucking brilliant. Powerful. Devastating.

I can't even quote my favourite bits back, because that would be *all* of it.

Those last two paragraphs especially are a fantastic, bittersweet kick in the teeth. (In a good way :-)

*goes back up to reread*

*is speechless all over again*

sleep_not November 1 2010, 15:23:05 UTC

EEE! So glad you liked it!

I actually got a bit of writer's block before doing the sex/masturbation scene because there's so many good, hot LoM fic out there and I wanted it to be hot (I am so lame). It's very gratifying to hear I got the tone I was aiming for (your comment is way too good for my ego).

chamekke November 1 2010, 16:21:25 UTC

Well, I thought it worked beautifully :-)

Wee typo alert: "her breathe" should be "her breath".

sleep_not November 1 2010, 17:07:49 UTC

Thanks!

margo_kim November 3 2010, 02:39:44 UTC

What a good look into Sam's mind. What a depressing place. This fic did a great job of conveying that. Plus, Sam/Hand=OTP. And that was hot. Good use of sex as character study. It makes sense with Sam trying to reconnect to the world and feel alive because this is such a primal thing and it does make him feel alive but it also just guh Sam, let me give you a hug. The ending's so bitter, in a good way. The entire fic did a great job of showing Sam stuck between these two places.

His flat had been a textile mill once, certainly, but Sam had never been there at the time. The bricks are cold.I know it's not the showiest line, but this was my favorite. I thought it was a perfect, matter-of-fact statement that perfectly conveys what he's feeling ( ... )

basaltgrrl November 5 2010, 00:00:47 UTC

I had been meaning to comment on this! Can't believe I didn't already, because it is so good! I wrote a Sam-back-in-2006 piece that was far more depressing than this, but this works and feel very right, Sam trying to appreciate the now and yet... and yet... the past, or the coma feels so REAL to him. You captured that so wonderfully!

spiderwood December 8 2010, 03:48:21 UTC

Okay, I waited to read this until I'd seen at least a few episodes of LoM (I've been spoiled for the ending), so I haven't seen anywhere near the whole thing yet, but - where I am now, there's still that constant jarring sense of unreality to the show, with Sam still trying to wake up and get back to his own reality, and Sam's utter loneliness. And I'm not sure whether that tone stays over the course of the show, or whether it'll disappear as Sam gets used to 1973, but you brought it (or rather, its mirror image) out very beautifully.

And in between the loneliness and the bitterness, it is also, as I may have mentioned, *smoking* ("Liked a little bite to his bark, a little sting in the friction" ggggguh).

I would very much like to see the rest of these fics. Especially 'tied down'! Please please please please please?