Going Home-chapter 4

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Title:  Going Home
Chapter:   Chapter 4
Fandom:  One Tree Hill
Pairing:  Brooke/Peyton and Brooke/Haley (friendship for them!)
Rating:  PG-13
Disclaimer:  I really, really don't own, so please don't sue.
A/N:  Don't hate me after reading this chapter!  Most people seemed to hate this chapter, maybe because I dared to bring in one het pairing or because

Comments

On to chapter 4!

[wildb9arsgalore]

I thought this chapter was very well-written. You give us a lot of insight into Haley, and are as convincing with her voice as with Brooke´s. I think it´s quite outstanding, up until the point where she talks with Lucas. It felt a bit awkward, as if more should have been present in that scene.

Anyway, I thought this was a really good chapter, one that made me feel like I really knew Haley, and made me respect her profoundly. Her tiredness rang very true, her broken faith but stubborn resolve to bear her life out leaped out of the page.

I´m just not sure how you´re going to juggle the differente points of view, honestly. I don´t know how the story will work with alternating points of view, but I´m looking forward to reading the rest!

Thanks a lot.

Re: On to chapter 4!

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Thanks for taking the time to comment. I'm also glad you don't hold back and point out where you find things...lacking