The Captain and Constance

[sly_vishiss]

He sat down at his heavy cherry desk and put the letter down on its surface

Comments

[sex_and_drugs]

I like the ending more than the actual piece. But I like what the guy has to say. It makes me a little happier.

[frankchen]

First, I'd like to say that only a man with huge balls would use a cheesy line like that.

As for the piece itself, it is thoroughly written and written excedingly well, but the lead up to the ending doesn't really do it for me. The last few sentences are nice, but the paragraphs directly preceding it are just too perfect/coincidental for me to accept in reality.

[echo_faded]

literature allows us to create our own reality, so the fact that it seems so perfect is only natural. everybody wants life to work out perfectly, but it just doesn't happen.

[devthekoala]

im hoping you didnt write this

[sly_vishiss]

i did... why are you hoping i didn't?

-el marco

[devthekoala]

i wrote down a bunch of things but decided they sounded too harsh.

i think the main reason i didnt like the story was the fact there wasnt the same level of character developement im used to and i dont have a very good imagination.

[sly_vishiss]

sorry... don't expect much character development when it's not that long.

it was more of a whatever than a story.

or maybe i'm just being defensive.

-el marco

wow

[anonymous]

wow mark, i had NO idea that you could write like this!

Lauren