Chapter 2

[alliecat8]

I'm going to forgo headers from now on, because we all know we're here for Jack/Sawyer, it'll be anywhere from PG-13 to NC-17, and no spoilers past S1 because that's when canon and this 'verse parted ways. Since it's NaNo and I'm trying to crank out a couple of thousand words a day, don't hold me to very high editing standards, okay

Comments

[hkath]

Yay! You've got some interesting stuff going on with possible plot directions and I'm totally loving the atmosphere here :D

Keep it up! More, please!!!

[alliecat8]

:D

There's lots more already, but I'm trying to pace what I post. It's hard to edit when you're trying to meet a quota every day, too, so I can see that the 'verse will go on well past the time when NaNo ends. I'm so happy you're here! *hugs tight*

[jenthegypsy]

Most of these girls appreciate the beauty of the Smokies through your words alone. I am in the unique position of being able to layer your written descriptions over my mental image of our beloved mountains, and, it should come as no surprise, find the two blend seamlessly. You know the mountains, girl; you know the vistas, the way the ancient, rounded peaks rise one after another for as far as you can see, how the ridges run and the tree-line changes at the heights. You know how it feels to stand above the low lying clouds, how they appear solid enough to walk on, and if you could but take that first step, you could walk from peak to peak to peak, never once touching the earth. he hears the echo of Sawyer’s voice telling him, “That, Doc, is why they call ‘em the Smokies.” I hear the echo of Sawyer's voice, too, and he is speaking for all of us who love these mountains

[alliecat8]

I was hoping you'd read this and it would take you home! That feeling of standing above the clouds is something akin to heaven. Have you ever climbed Mount LeConte? That's what I was channeling when I wrote that scene.

Homesick = me.

And absent-minded Jack is love. ;) He would SO be scatterbrained about remembering the shopping list. *♥ 's him for it*

* ♥ 's and smooches you for reading and relating!*

[jenthegypsy]

Climbed Mt. LeConte on several occasions in my misspent youth, none since, more's the pity. If you keep writing this verse, though, I may have to gear up and hike one of the winter trails. Wanna come with?

And yes, nothing so endearing as absent-minded Jack, unless it is puppy-dog-eyed Sawyer!

&hearts's you back!

[alliecat8]

I am starting to get in the mood to pay a visit! Too bad it's past peak leaf season; I hear it was gorgeous this year. But heh, after my New Orleans trip at the end of the month, I'm gonna need to burn off some calories, so I will definitely keep the idea in mind! :)

*uses icon just for you*

[spicy_zanella]

just wanted to let you know how much i am loving this story and cant wait to read more!...am friending your LJ since i'm on a lost high right now and feel like surrounding myself with as much lost love as possible...hope you dont mind!

[alliecat8]

Hi! Welcome to the Lost love! :D

I'm glad you're enjoying the story so far. There will be more soon, I promise! Thank you for reading and liking. :)

[gemjam]

Wow, everything at the beginning of this chapter, the homeliness of them in bed together and then Jack's run, that's some really beautiful, emotive writing. The descriptions of the mountains, it's obvious that's somewhere you know and love and it came across really well here. I know nothing about the Smokies but you're definitely helping me learn and they sound amazing :)

I love the bit where Jack finds the cemetery and the graves of Sawyer's parents, the graves untended, that's just how I'd see it, that was a very strong image. And the part where Jack wonders if he'd look after his father's grave and deciding that he probably would, but you get the impression it's more out of a sense of duty than because he'd actually care about looking after it.

Jack's thoughts on Sawyer fixing up the house, especially this - Jack doesn't know if it's nostalgia or just a need to fix the past that keeps Sawyer tied to this house - I can so see that and I think it's probably a bit of both but I kind of love the idea of him righting his wrongs in

[alliecat8]

Oh, I love to hear feedback from people who have never been to the Smokies! I'm worried that I'm not doing them justice, so THANK YOU for saying you think I did.

but you get the impression it's more out of a sense of duty than because he'd actually care about looking after it.

I think that's probably true. Jack would do what he's supposed to do, while Sawyer tends to defy conventions.

how he decides that something's his rather than most people who acquire things without any kind of decision involved.Poor Sawyer, he's been deprived of so much, while things have always come easily (and I mean that in the sense of material things) to Jack. I think Sawyer's had to decide what he wants so he can take it for himself. It's made him what he is, for good or for bad

[cynthia_arrow]

God, I really loved the part where Jack was taking his jog.. The descriptions were just gorgeous. I have little patience for description, but your writing always makes me want to stop and meander in the view you're giving us.

And the observations Jack has are spot on, about God and gravestones and especially Sawyer and his relationship to all this.

I grew up visiting the smokies nearly every year with my father, so it's good to see how at home Sawyer is here--it seems so fitting for the kind of man he's become. And I'm eager to see if Jack can make a home there, too.

[alliecat8]

I'm like you, I tend to avoid descriptions both when writing and when reading, but this series just seemed to need them. Maybe the difference is that when we're writing what we've already seen on tv it's not necessary, but when we want to paint a new picture there's more leeway. And you've seen the Smokies, so I take it as high praise that you think I did them justice.

Poor Sawyer has strayed so far from home, literally and figuratively, I just wanted to bring him full-circle. Some might call it wishful thinking, and I'd probably agree with them. But it was satisfying for me, and it makes me really happy to hear that it was for you, too. Thank you! ♥