This chapter's a bit longer (word count: 5,248) but it's smutty, that's my excuse. And please bear with a certain schmoopy conversation; it'll be de-schmoopified in a later chapter but for now it needs to be the way it is.
Oh, hon, I'm sorry you're sick! I will send Dr. Jack just as soon as Sawyer is, um, done with him. ;)
I'm a little nervous addressing both the class and the sexual orientation issues in this story; it's a good way to step on toes I don't mean to step on. I'm glad this comm is mostly made up of people who already know me well enough to know that I don't mean to offend anyone, no matter what their background or beliefs. The class thing is going to be a theme, but not in the way you might think. And you and others on my flist helped me crystallize it in my head that Jack is not a snob, he's just sheltered and a bit oblivious. Thank you for that!
Sawyer is right, Jack's mother is jealous of Sawyer because he gets to have Jack and she doesn't.Yes, and the difference between them is that Sawyer wants him because he loves him, but I'm not so sure Margo does. I think she just wants him for status, to bask in his reflected glory. Sawyer really wants him to be happy
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So many comments to give and way too sick to do it now. Just wanted to drop a preliminary *guh* and to assure you that I was here and I was swept away by this chapter. Will return as soon as I am able to leave a real comment.
But...but...Regas?!? On GAY STREET??? You devil, you! Is this a test to see if I really grew up in Knoxville? ;) Have you ever eaten at Tomato Head on Market Square? Oh, I almost feel better just thinking of home... *hugs*
*sigh* I read this, what, 11 days ago and I have to tell you, this description has stayed in the forefront of my mind ever since: Sawyer stands still, looking at him with hooded eyes, the soft light reflecting gold on his lowered lashes. Jack’s eyes touch him everywhere, all the planes and hollows revealed by the dancing light, every curve and hard line of muscle bathed in an amber glow. That is one of the most incredible visuals of Sawyer I have ever read, powerful and sensual enough to have become permanent in my Sawyer-lovin' little heart. His lashes have always been a major turn on for me, and to see them bathed in the glow of the firelight just about brings me to my knees.
This chapter is funny, tender, emotionally charged and sensual, all in one. I wish I could have commented the night I first read it, and I hope that you know how much I love it, even though I'm not very articulate any more. &hearts
Aw, thank you about the visual. I was Mary Sue-ing Jack like crazy there, picking out all of the parts of Sawyer that *I* wanted to see in the firelight. Guh, those eyelashes.
Don't worry about being articulate, it's enough just to know you're pleased. *hearts you like crazy*
wow, that was a great chapter. I'm glad that the dinner went all right, even if I'm not at all convinced that Sawyer is out of the woods with Margot. I love that Jack dressed Sawyer up, although I understand Sawyer's insecurities about his background. It's nice to have them reveal stuff, like football for Jack.
the sex scene is beautiful and sensual, I loved it. I can see them both glow next to the fire and that's such a lovely image.
It's nice to have them reveal stuff, like football for Jack.
Foxy played football for Columbia, and I figured that if canon could have Jack go to the same college that Foxy did, I could have Jack play football, too! Guh. (You know I have a thing for football players!)
Those boys in firelight just make me swoon. I'm glad you think I did justice to that in the scene. I wanted to end this chapter on a happy note.
I'm so glad you're enjoying it! It's the support and encouragement from you and others that's getting me through all the rough patches, so, *HUGS HUGS HUGS*
SQUEE!!! Um, that's all I can say. For now. You make me happy. Sawyer telling Jack he was proud got me all shivery. Dammit, I have to get back to work... but now all I want to do is read more Jack & Sawyer!
Sawyer telling Jack he was proud got me all shivery.
I kinda got all choked up when I wrote that. That's all Jack's ever wanted, you know? For somebody to be proud of him...and not in the self-serving way his mother wants to be. Thank you for choosing that part to comment on. It means a lot to me. *hugs*
Their argument at the beginning is so perfect, and the way it ends is SO hot. Maybe I'm twisted (probably), but there's something about them fighting and giving in that's even hotter than the actual sex scene. Which was steamy, too, don't get me wrong.
You kind of faked us out about Jack's mom, didn't you? Or that will rear its ugly head later. You did a great job with her character, and the way the two of them interacted with her. Fleshing out the untold backstory.
OK, I just read the other comments and have to add to what I said.
The part where Sawyer said Jack made him proud, and Jack's reaction to that? So fabulous. Very, very well written and well conveyed, and very emotional as well.
And I have to second what isis2015 said about your addressing class and sexual orientation issues in this story. The class thing is sometimes alluded to between them in fic, but never to the depth that you've gone to. But mostly I have to applaud you for actually addressing the sexual orientation issue here realistically. I can think of maybe 2 out of the hundreds of slash stories I've read that did that. Too often there's two guys together in slash, but somehow they're still magically not gay, and while I'm sure that's part of the fantasy, it bugs me. So good for you for bringing it up and doing it well.
Too often there's two guys together in slash, but somehow they're still magically not gay, and while I'm sure that's part of the fantasy, it bugs me.
I think it has something to do with showing how much they love each other, if their love can transcend their sexual orientation. That's the fantasy, I guess. But with a character like Jack, it kind of makes sense to me that he's spent his whole life trying to live up to his parents' expectations, so he probably never even questioned being hereosexual because that was what was expected of him. And then the island erased all the parameters of the real world.
Sawyer being proud of Jack was Sawyer understanding what Jack needs most in the world. It's gonna take Jack a lot longer (til the end of the story) to figure out what it is that Sawyer needs most. Sawyer's always the better people-reader, I guess.
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I'm a little nervous addressing both the class and the sexual orientation issues in this story; it's a good way to step on toes I don't mean to step on. I'm glad this comm is mostly made up of people who already know me well enough to know that I don't mean to offend anyone, no matter what their background or beliefs. The class thing is going to be a theme, but not in the way you might think. And you and others on my flist helped me crystallize it in my head that Jack is not a snob, he's just sheltered and a bit oblivious. Thank you for that!
Sawyer is right, Jack's mother is jealous of Sawyer because he gets to have Jack and she doesn't.Yes, and the difference between them is that Sawyer wants him because he loves him, but I'm not so sure Margo does. I think she just wants him for status, to bask in his reflected glory. Sawyer really wants him to be happy ( ... )
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But...but...Regas?!? On GAY STREET??? You devil, you! Is this a test to see if I really grew up in Knoxville? ;) Have you ever eaten at Tomato Head on Market Square? Oh, I almost feel better just thinking of home... *hugs*
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Yup, Regas! You are sharp, girlfriend! It was just too good to resist, even though I figured I was only amusing myself. ;D
I haven't been to Tomato Head, but I'm going home for Thanksgiving, should I check it out?
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This chapter is funny, tender, emotionally charged and sensual, all in one. I wish I could have commented the night I first read it, and I hope that you know how much I love it, even though I'm not very articulate any more. &hearts
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Don't worry about being articulate, it's enough just to know you're pleased. *hearts you like crazy*
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the sex scene is beautiful and sensual, I loved it. I can see them both glow next to the fire and that's such a lovely image.
you are doing great with this, I love it. ♥
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Foxy played football for Columbia, and I figured that if canon could have Jack go to the same college that Foxy did, I could have Jack play football, too! Guh. (You know I have a thing for football players!)
Those boys in firelight just make me swoon. I'm glad you think I did justice to that in the scene. I wanted to end this chapter on a happy note.
I'm so glad you're enjoying it! It's the support and encouragement from you and others that's getting me through all the rough patches, so, *HUGS HUGS HUGS*
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I kinda got all choked up when I wrote that. That's all Jack's ever wanted, you know? For somebody to be proud of him...and not in the self-serving way his mother wants to be. Thank you for choosing that part to comment on. It means a lot to me. *hugs*
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Their argument at the beginning is so perfect, and the way it ends is SO hot. Maybe I'm twisted (probably), but there's something about them fighting and giving in that's even hotter than the actual sex scene. Which was steamy, too, don't get me wrong.
You kind of faked us out about Jack's mom, didn't you? Or that will rear its ugly head later. You did a great job with her character, and the way the two of them interacted with her. Fleshing out the untold backstory.
Yeah. Just loved this.
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The part where Sawyer said Jack made him proud, and Jack's reaction to that? So fabulous. Very, very well written and well conveyed, and very emotional as well.
And I have to second what isis2015 said about your addressing class and sexual orientation issues in this story. The class thing is sometimes alluded to between them in fic, but never to the depth that you've gone to. But mostly I have to applaud you for actually addressing the sexual orientation issue here realistically. I can think of maybe 2 out of the hundreds of slash stories I've read that did that. Too often there's two guys together in slash, but somehow they're still magically not gay, and while I'm sure that's part of the fantasy, it bugs me. So good for you for bringing it up and doing it well.
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I think it has something to do with showing how much they love each other, if their love can transcend their sexual orientation. That's the fantasy, I guess. But with a character like Jack, it kind of makes sense to me that he's spent his whole life trying to live up to his parents' expectations, so he probably never even questioned being hereosexual because that was what was expected of him. And then the island erased all the parameters of the real world.
Sawyer being proud of Jack was Sawyer understanding what Jack needs most in the world. It's gonna take Jack a lot longer (til the end of the story) to figure out what it is that Sawyer needs most. Sawyer's always the better people-reader, I guess.
Again, ♥ ♥ ♥ for reading and liking!
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As for Jack's mom, wait and see. ;) I didn't want to do the predictable thing. She's gonna be trouble, though.
SO glad you're liking this so far! ♥
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