Dare Her (Version 2)
With this song, I wanted to write a story about a girl. But not with a traditional plot-line. I'm hoping that can be extracted from it. The best part is besides the bridge, there are no repeating stanzas. Comments
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her boyfriend started a fight
threw up his hands and yelled at her
battered passion is a curse
she ran all the way home
she ran into the unknown
drew a bath into the tub
to wash herself in her own blood"
This is good, especially the second stanza. Please do not use "big ass mess" or I will bitch slap you. THe story telling is good...maybe delve into her fneral afterwards since you are already dealing in the macarbe (spl?)
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