Try It Again

[snapsparagus]

Seth stood in the doorway of Ryan’s Chino bedroom, taking in the scene before him. His head felt hot and heavy and his jaw slowly lowered in disbelief, leaving his mouth open slightly. He knew that in a few seconds he’d have to spring into action. In a few seconds he’d have to be the strong one, the pillar. In a few seconds, he hoped, he’d have the

Comments

[jonsmom14]

Wow! Great story! I hope you plan to continue this. Surely Dawn and AJ will get arrested now that Sandy knows the brutality of the beating that Ryan received. Gotta love hurt Ryan fics! Yay for Seth for taking a stand!

[snapsparagus]

Thanks for reading and reviewing (shy smile). I'm so glad you liked it. I'm wondering if I should continue it...I hadn't really thought about it but after I finished writing it I thought of more I could do....

Anyway. Thanks!

[jonsmom14]

There's definitely a lot of potential here. I would love to see you explore it!

[alluxera]

My congratulations to the first story! I like it.

“I don’t want you to go,” Ryan said, feeling suddenly like a very small child.

Okay,” Ryan felt foolish. He strained his neck to watch Seth leave,

I especially loved these lines. Thank you and I'm looking forward to the next part.

[snapsparagus]

Thanks so much! It's neat to see what lines stuck out - I'll have to remember to do the same when reviewing. I'm excited now about continuing this story. :)

[mirella67]

I'm amazed this is your first fic; it's really good. I look forward to seeing what's next!

[snapsparagus]

Wow, thank you. That means a lot to me!

[fifimom]

Nicely done. I'm a reader not a writer and I look forward to reading you again. Thanks for sharing.

[snapsparagus]

Thank you!

[beachtree]

First fic, huh? It's a great debut. You've chosen the most compelling time to explore too. There's so much potential at this stage with all of the misconceptions and the broad gap between the two different worlds that are colliding and that Ryan is forced to straddle and integrate. Just trying to determine how the relationships and dynamics might develop is like dangling a carrot. And so much hinges on Kirsten as the linchpin and her perceptions. In this case, both Sandy and Seth have had an up close and personal glimpse into Ryan's life. That's quite the twist already and it could alter any number of circumstances to follow.

I hope you take this further. Thanks for sharing!

[snapsparagus]

I love to write, but I haven't written for an audience since college. And I've never used existing characters before, which was in a lot of ways more complicated than using made-up characters. There's accountability with fanfic, LOL. I mean, I knew that but I didn't *know* it until I tried it.

I couldn't sleep last night because I was plotting out the next chapter. One thing I'm sure of - just as you perceived - is that Kirsten is going to make things more difficult before anything gets easier.

Thank you for your insightful review. I'm loving feeling welcomed into this community. :)

[beachtree]

If you love to write, then you've come to the right place. I'm glad you've found an outlet, and hopefully a comfort zone as well as something challenging and enjoyable to explore. And, sure, there's accountability with fanfic in terms of characterization, but the extent is up to you- and how much you go AU vs. adhering to canon for events, characters, etc. with missing scenes, rewriting "better versions" that are more natural and plausible, or taking the characters and putting them in new scenarios.

Ah, the Kirsten factor. So much depends on her. It's a shame her relationship with Ryan wasn't examined and developed on the show. The same with Caleb... And we so needed more of what started it all and should have been more of the focal point: Ryan/Sandy. Yeah, the list is long!

Anyway, welcome, good luck with this story and all that's to come.