brigit's flame - june: week 1, "fugue refugee"

[so_wordy]

A short one-shot for BF's June contest. Wrapping my mind around this prompt (Fugue, Refugee) was hard. Let's hope the following weeks become a lot easier. :)

Comments

[belluminabyssus]

This came out well! I think you did a very good job with that concept, and, like I said, I found myself completely not caring about the setting. You did just enough explaining that it worked. Also, the last line is a kicker. The whole story feels very surrealist and I enjoyed it quite a bit. :D

[so_wordy]

Thankee, dear!

I often find setting not to be very important in my stories (and by this, I mean pointless scenery. I've seen authors go on for pages describing a wall). If my character's not interacting with it, or it doesn't help the mood, then off it goes! *drags out a red pen*

[keppiehed]

I think you are at your best with these stories of the post-apocalypse/future/war. The barren setting is a great backdrop for your style, and it also allows the richness of the characters emotions to juxtapose quite nicely. You always leave me wanting more, which is about as good as it gets for a writer, and I wish I knew your secret!

[so_wordy]

:D :D :D

Thank you oodles! I am finding that I have quite the fascination with post-apocalyptic worlds--quite a change from my fluid prose and not a subject I ever thought I'd tackle. Your encouragement is such brain food, Keppie. You're the best!

[rubyelf]

Your descriptions are great... detailed enough to paint a clear picture but sparse enough not to waste words or images. Nice surreal feeling to all of it. Great job!

[so_wordy]

Thanks, ruby! :)

[osoreranai]

Okay, so, seriously? I need to take lessons in showing versus telling from you. Seriously for serious. Because you walk that fine line really well - you don't overindulge in description, but you bring out a couple strong details and then the reader fill in the rest.

These settings that you've been using lately really do bring that out well.

[so_wordy]

*blushes* Thank you for the compliments!

I find that I'm inspired by whomever I read. For scenery (the poignant type), I recommend Hemingway and Nabakov (Lolita). Also, I love people watching and writing stories in my head. So many cues are nonverbal. :)

using my cat, Prof Arthur Newton, to ROAR

[bardiphouka]

I love the surreal quality of it. Sort of like Salvadore Dali doing a graphic Twilight Zone sort of feel. And the fact that things are not resolved neatly, always my favourite,eh? Very well done.