lost fic: one foot in sea, one on shore (rachel, jacob)

[angeldylan628]

Title: one foot in sea, one on shore
Character(s)/Pairing(s): rachel, jacob (rachel/jacob)
Word Count/Rating: PG-13, 1,342
Summary: Rachel always dreamed big.
A/N: For ozmissage at lostsquee who asked for Lost ladies. Somehow, I started writing a Juliet fic and this is what I got instead. I have no idea why. Title taken from Mumford & Sons lyrics.

Comments

[ozmissage]

Goosebumps, I have them.

There's nothing about this fic that isn't absolutely perfect. You give Rachel so much life, her character feels so vivid and real. I love her strength here and her straightforwardness. The way she keeps seeing Jacob, but Juliet never notices gave me chills.

And the fact that he falls in love with her is beautiful and twisted and amazing. I love the idea that he visited her over the years and the scene where he touches her was incredibly moving. Everything about this story is so atmospheric and filled with this sense of longing. You made me feel for Jacob and that's no easy task.

Also this is such a spot-on, heartbreaking Juliet characterization:

Juliet leaves in a flurry of 'I can't do this' and 'I'll talk to you tomorrow' and Rachel tries to stall her, but Juliet does what she's been doing since she was nine and runs.

Oh, Juliet. That's totally how I imagine that went down. And then the end:

She looks beautiful. The light has finally returned to her eyes, though he's not sure it was ever really gone,

[angeldylan628]

Oh gosh. I'm so glad you liked it! I was a little worried since I wound up writing such a random character, but I was watching some S3 Juliet scenes the other day and I was struck by Rachel and when you asked for the ladies of Lost I just couldn't get this fic out of my head even when I was trying so hard to write just Juliet[/ramble]

Thank you for the feedback! I really hope you enjoyed your day as queen! :)

[aurilly]

Wow, this gave me chills. I just love your Jacob characterization. THIS is the Jacob I was so in love with. All the cryptic half-replies ("Everyone's dying" and "I've been called worse" and "I come and go") that are pretty much my favorite things about stories with immortals. But the line that really got to me was Jacob saying he wished he could stay. It's so sad, the job he has to do and the way he's set it up for himself. And then him healing her like he healed Locke and her knowing he's not part of her tumor... god, this was absolutely perfect.

[angeldylan628]

Jacob is so hard to write, so it's awesome to hear that I'm doing something right with the character. Thank you for reading and for the feedback (you always leave such wonderful comments)! I'm really glad you enjoyed the fic :)

[valhalla37]

This is so, so fantastic -- I've never been particularly interested in Jacob, but there's something about this, and the inclusion of Rachel, that works so perfectly. I love that her life is as woven into Jacob's presence as her sister's, especially the moment where they're drinking wine together. So chilling!

[angeldylan628]

Thank you, sweetie! I'm really glad you enjoyed this despite not being interested in Jacob! I'm kind of touch and go when it comes to that character as well.

[luminousdaze]

Oooh, Jacob off Island and being all sad, mysterious and romantic I like how your mind works. ♥

This part is so cool!

When she is fifteen, he's there for Juliet. He walks towards them, passes between them, brushing Juliet's arm.

And this part is right out of my daydreams - well technically your imagination but also my daydreams (don't tell anyone). ;)

He brushes his lips over the top of her head. The touch sends a shiver down her spine, makes her take a deep breath in. It covers her entire body in warmth and light. She cannot describe it properly.

[angeldylan628]

Thank you for the feedback! I'm glad you liked the fic...and how my mind works ;)

[op_de_radio]

My God, this was amazing. I loved it. :)