Assignment

[soccerguy25]

Short Story i had to write for the class.

Enjoy.

Any criticisms/ critiquing be nice.

be warned its pretty bad.

Comments

[nioki]

Very good description of the environment. I dunno what the assignment was but I did want to know more about the character's background or something similar it.

[soccerguy25]

only had 2 pages concentrated on environment

[jentherockstar]

I disagree. Leaving the background unknown allows the character to associate better with everyone. He could have been anything before the war and now he is just a soldier.

But there were a few gramatical (that's probably spelled wrong.) errors and a few sentences that I thought could have been worded a bit different.

But all in all I thought it was well done! ^_^

[amadathy]

My tense change radar is going off. It goes from past to present. But you put words together very nicely :-)