Maybe a mild warning for imagery on this one - not anything that hasn't been alluded to in the story already, and nothing exactly explicit, but I feel to put it out there. ( Part 20 )
Huh, I think the pacing worked just fine. It was a wider step forward, but it worked well with this chapter. Great stuff. As usual, your imagery is excellent. I really felt right alongside Reid through the last part and I could clearly see Morgan, Prentiss and JJ in the station. Am anxious for the next part! Well, more like craves like a junkie does their drug of choice :-P
Well good. Thanks for that. :) The original of this chapter had more shifting povs, a faster pace, and spent less time just getting Reid inside, but it just wasn't working. This is slower, and I think that's what I was worried about.
And maybe the warning on the imagery should be a little more for the next chapter than this. I've been kind of lumping them together as I wrote. Although, even then...
The pacing seems fine, the tension is high, and the suspense is killing me. Two more parts??? Auuuuggghhhhh!!!! I'm torn between desperately wanting to know what happens and not wanting this to end. *nervously bites nails*
Thank you. I kind of ran myself in circles with this one, and that's what took a few weeks to get it posted. The original version was faster paced, but I kind of decided I needed to keep us in Reid's head. It's the longest pov from one person in the fic. It slows the build, but it sat better with me... just wasn't sure how it would sit with the readers. Still not sure how it's sitting with the readers, but glad it worked for you.
For a minute there, I thought you'd suddenly become a Criminal Minds fan and I was going to try to warn you off. It has lots of fantastic dynamics, but true to form, just when I start liking a show, the creators start doing things with it that make me grumpy. And there's too much TV out there to put up with things that make me grumpy, lol.
I'm among the living, but I feel like the walking dead, lol. I think I'm on a streak of bad luck, but I can't complain too hard. How about you?
I've never seen an ep of CM--don't even know who the actors are--so no worries! Although I feel bad I am using a comment on your fic I haven't even read. But I thought I would try to grab you when I knew you were online. :)
I hope it stops making you grumpy soon! My two TV happy places atm are Merlin and the new Hawaii Five-O. Pure joy on both to date.
What's the streak of bad luck entail? Is the end in sight?
I'm kind of on a good roll--fall classes are almost over and just started hopefully my last class ever (I know I've said that before, but I really MEAN it this time...:D). Internship is set to start mid-Jan and I can't wait. The move back was exactly the right thing to do.
Write more when you can--I want to hear about everything!
Oh good (stay away from it, lol) :D Really, the main part that made me grumpy on CM is that the they dumped one of the female leads, and are planning to dump another this year so they can "rejuvenate" the show... because, women over 30 can't be on TV, or be interesting characters, didn't you know
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Good. :) Glad you liked the long stretch in Reid's head. I think after I have it all posted, maybe I'll feel different about how I've gone and paced it... we'll see.
As for the confusion... there are things you should be confused about, yes, and things you shouldn't. And I'm trying to decide a bit if I need to subtly clarify some things. Any chance you could let me know what sections feel most confusing to you, or what you think is happening in the building?
Thank you so much for this helpful feedback. And I'm very very sorry for my long delay in responding. And, no worries, I'm not sensitive about this type of feedback, nor particularly sensitive about my writing in general, actually. I had an art teacher who used to draw these incredible pictures on the chalkboard, and after we were all oo-ing and aw-ing he would erase them like that. His point was if we get too attached to our own work, we can't improve it. It was one of the best lessons any of my teachers every taught me about my writing
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OMG WHAT EVEN. I should hate you for ending it right there if it wasn't so beautifully exquisite. Jesus, this whole fic is beautifuly exquisite and I have been mainlining it for the better part of today, I NEED MORE. I feel like a junkie, omg, needs another hit!
I love the characterization of everyone, it's absolutely spot on, and the atmosphere you've created is so desperate and scary and frayed and POOR REID. I am both excited it's almost going to be concluded (the story arc, I mean, because there's only so much suspence a girl can take) and sad it'll be over and we won't be able to fully see the aftermath. PLZ BE OKAY, TEAM. PLZ BE OKAY.
Thank you so much! I am so sorry that I am the slowest poster on the planet. Work has been different, and more intense this fall, and I'll be taking a fanfiction hiatus once this is done.
I think you may get more of the aftermath than you think, though maybe not. I tend towards the side of long epilogues and drawn out denouement. Regardless, hope your satisfied with what there will be of it. :D
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And maybe the warning on the imagery should be a little more for the next chapter than this. I've been kind of lumping them together as I wrote. Although, even then...
Thanks again.
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Thanks again!
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For a minute there, I thought you'd suddenly become a Criminal Minds fan and I was going to try to warn you off. It has lots of fantastic dynamics, but true to form, just when I start liking a show, the creators start doing things with it that make me grumpy. And there's too much TV out there to put up with things that make me grumpy, lol.
I'm among the living, but I feel like the walking dead, lol. I think I'm on a streak of bad luck, but I can't complain too hard. How about you?
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I hope it stops making you grumpy soon! My two TV happy places atm are Merlin and the new Hawaii Five-O. Pure joy on both to date.
What's the streak of bad luck entail? Is the end in sight?
I'm kind of on a good roll--fall classes are almost over and just started hopefully my last class ever (I know I've said that before, but I really MEAN it this time...:D). Internship is set to start mid-Jan and I can't wait. The move back was exactly the right thing to do.
Write more when you can--I want to hear about everything!
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As for the confusion... there are things you should be confused about, yes, and things you shouldn't. And I'm trying to decide a bit if I need to subtly clarify some things. Any chance you could let me know what sections feel most confusing to you, or what you think is happening in the building?
Too much to ask? :D :D
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I love the characterization of everyone, it's absolutely spot on, and the atmosphere you've created is so desperate and scary and frayed and POOR REID. I am both excited it's almost going to be concluded (the story arc, I mean, because there's only so much suspence a girl can take) and sad it'll be over and we won't be able to fully see the aftermath. PLZ BE OKAY, TEAM. PLZ BE OKAY.
In conclusion: omg, needs another hit!
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I think you may get more of the aftermath than you think, though maybe not. I tend towards the side of long epilogues and drawn out denouement. Regardless, hope your satisfied with what there will be of it. :D
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