Criminal Minds: Trompe L'oeil (part 6)

[sodakey]

~ (part six) ~

The second victim had still been alive when she'd been found, but was dead before she reached the hospital. They hadn't been on the case yet. They were told later that her eyes had stayed closed the whole time, calm and still, like she'd just been sleeping instead of in distress. Arms crossed carefully over her chest. Just like the

Comments

[jerico_cacaw]

Oooooh, I love this fic. I love the slow pace, and Reid's mental state, and the team's mental state :). Case!fic is my favorite genre, and you do it really well -- I can almost see this in a real episode.

Aaand. I see no formatting problem ... (and <3 your icon, BTW. cute Reid is cute)

[sodakey]

Thank you so much. Like a few others, I tend to write what I like to read. Thus in this genre: Team interaction. Team in general. Reid. Hotch. Morgan. Psychological... stuff. :)

Aaaand, the formatting put triple spaces between all the paragraphs at first (even though it didn't show up that way in the preview). Curse-ed LJ. I don't know why. I manually took them out and I think we're good now.

So glad to know your thoughts. Thank you again.

[sodakey]

Ohhhh, p.s. glad you dig the icon. It was made by a talented cat named lanerta here on LJ.

[water_soter]

Oh but Overlord of Evil, you can do no wrong!!! Your words are like drops of cool water for a man that had spent months in the desert without any water.

That aside, this was another nicely written part. Nice way of dropping hints here and there and keeping the intensity of crime throughout. Your pacing technique is probably one of the best I have ever seen. You really leave me starving for more.

[sodakey]

Thank you. Thank you. ;) Mwaaahaha.

O sea...

Okay, I'm still working on my evil laugh.

In more seriousness, I really appreciate the feedback.

[westmoon]

I'm gasping at the tension here. Seriously.

The characters, the suspense, and the - I don't know how to phrase it - the silences and the white spaces.

This is marvelous, powerful stuff.

Thank you.

[sodakey]

Thank you so much for your feedback.

Silences and white spaces... are not for everyone, I know. But I enjoy writing them. It's always extra nice when the readers enjoy them too. And your phrasing of that is probably more artful than my entire fic. Fantastic. Thanks again.

[super_pan]

Oh dear, you are ratcheting up the tension. One worries about JJ. And Gideon. Also you push my Hotch!Girl buttons! And my maternal buttons for poor Reid.

And I am digging Rossi! I like the way he is getting s**t out into the open!

Yay new chapter!

[sodakey]

Fantastic. Much love for the feedback as I'm still a little wary of my Rossi-voice. Thank you.

And, I myself, love Hotch. ;)

[daylyn]

Creepy. Very, very creepy. Poor JJ. Poor Reid. Poor team. Well done. This story is really intriguing. I'm hooked.

[sodakey]

Yay. Fantastic to still have you reading. Thanks much for the feedback.