Listen, pal you're satire is about what i say it is about...you have no choice...and if your satire is about what you say it is about you deserved what ever low grade you got...you were supposed to clearly illustrate the point...and arrouse feelings of anger or contempt at the subject in your paper...the only anger or contempt you evoked from me was the anger at you because i actually sat there and read all 13 pages of the crap...just because your satire sucks doesn't mean you can say anyone who states that fact is "misunderstanding it" you can figure out who i am...i'm relentlesly trashing you, and found your live journal with ease just to do it...so i'm probably Ben, BoBo, Or Dan...Dan's post would have ben littered with the word jew...so he's out...and ben probably wouldn't be caught dead commenting on you live journal...so take a wild guess...
Oh, the satire is what you say it's about? You're the one who has say in that, right? I mean, you did write it, and decide what it was going to be about, and decide what the message was going to be. Oh no wait! That was me! I did clearly illustrate the point, you just like making fun of stuff I do. I read it for the entire class. I don't really know what the students thought, but I know that the teacher liked it and understood it. And no one was like "What the hell was that?", so yeah.
The only option wasn't to invoke anger:
Write an ironic narrative of a controversial event from the point of view and in the words and in the words of someone whose interpretation of the event is totally different from yours. Your aim will be to make the narrator damn himself (or herself) with his own words, to make them look foolish or ignorant.The author starts off loving everyone, which is stupid. Then he joins stereotypes, which is also stupid, because they just hate everyone who isn't in their
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you have yet to read my satire...and i'm not bashing your satire just because it's yours...did etkins say she understood it...and if it takes you over a half a dozen pages to illustrate a point as simple as yours..then you're a bad writer...and anyone who teaches you should be bitched slapped for allowing you to pick up a pencil...but then again i'd like to bitch slap most of your teachers for general pricipals anyways...and the definition of the assignment you posted is for the "ironic narrative" not the satire,stupid...and high school social status is not only uncontraversial...it's also just boring to read about...
Okay, look, I'm obviously not getting through with you, so I'm going to type like you, and see if that helps.
its obvious that you are bashing it because its mine... you just saw this... decided to read it... you don't know what your talking about.... why don't you just shut up...
Nevermind, that's giving me a headache already.
You are definitely bashing it because it's mine. I mean, your argument doesn't even make any sense. First, it was that I didn't know what it was about. Now, it's that I took too long to illustrate my point. Right, because those entire novels that illustrate a single point in the form of satire are much shorter. While I agree it could be streamlined, there really isn't a whole lot in there that should be cut out to make the pacing better or the story more concise, not enough to make it a terrible paper anyways. Also, the reason that it's somewhat sloppier than other people's is that when it's half a page long, it's really easy to make nice and clean. Doesn't make it good, it makes it quick. Either way, it
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you just admitted that your story has horrible pacing...and is not concise...and you weren't supposed to write a novel...and not to be a nitpicker...but you don't space the word and the ellipse...
No, I admitted it indeed had some problems, but overall it was good. You were just exaggerating these problems and bashing it because I wrote it. It's not even that long, it's like 6 pages single spaced. Yeah, that's a fucking novel
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It's BoBo C. Tiberius!!!
anonymous
June 9 2004, 20:54:13 UTC
whatever jacob...you're just not open to criticism...
you see how annoying it is when someone doesn't respond to your argument just insults you personally...this isn't about my use of ellipse...or my half-assed satire i threw together in five seconds to garnish a grade...it's about you making a big deal of your satire...that isn't you good...you're topic isn't unique or contrversial...and you approach it in a bad way...that has all the making for a bad piece of writing...nothing is a "unique topic" and i never said mine was...everything has been said before...
Re: It's BoBo C. Tiberius!!!soggycroutonJune 9 2004, 21:40:15 UTC
I wasn't making a big deal of mine by putting it up here. The message just says here it is, read it, bitch. I just put it here because I thought people might be interested, and if they weren't they wouldn't read it. It's about teens, so the subject matter made me post it, not the quality.
What it isn't however, is terrible because of few problems. It's still amusing, and generally effective.
I can so take criticism. Based on your comments and some thoughts of my own, I'm revising the ending and other parts.
Everything is relative. If nothing is unique then the word for unique would change in meaning to mean relatively unique, something that is less done or not cliched and overused. So, relatively, it is fairly unique, and relatively, it is controversial, because a lot of people do just hate people because they stereotype. You can't just say I approach it in a "bad" way. Why is it bad? Because I efficiently whore every stereotype through an amusing anecdote, proving you can't just hide in one and hate all the others? No, that's good
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It's BoBo C. Tiberius!!!
anonymous
June 10 2004, 19:09:24 UTC
you approach it in a "bad" way because it is not amusing or enjoyable...it is not even relativly unique because everyone has said what you are saying...and it's not contraversial because no one gives a damn about teenage social status stereotypes...alliteration,bitch!
I didn't use an ellipse right there...what?!?
And i was kidding about the not open to criticism thing...that was used to prove a point...
Re: It's BoBo C. Tiberius!!!soggycroutonJune 10 2004, 19:26:02 UTC
It is amusing and/or enjoyable, everyone else who's read the whole thing has either said it was funny or good, even people who don't like/know me very well. PEER PRESSURE! And it's relatively controversial because people obviously do give a damn about high school teenage stereotypes, namely, teenagers, the audience for this paper. And everyone hasn't said what I'm saying, it's not that often approached, and when it is, it's not approached in this manner, and the message is somewhat different.
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Anyways, thanks for replying.
Oh, the satire is what you say it's about? You're the one who has say in that, right? I mean, you did write it, and decide what it was going to be about, and decide what the message was going to be. Oh no wait! That was me! I did clearly illustrate the point, you just like making fun of stuff I do. I read it for the entire class. I don't really know what the students thought, but I know that the teacher liked it and understood it. And no one was like "What the hell was that?", so yeah.
The only option wasn't to invoke anger:
Write an ironic narrative of a controversial event from the point of view and in the words and in the words of someone whose interpretation of the event is totally different from yours. Your aim will be to make the narrator damn himself (or herself) with his own words, to make them look foolish or ignorant.The author starts off loving everyone, which is stupid. Then he joins stereotypes, which is also stupid, because they just hate everyone who isn't in their ( ... )
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its obvious that you are bashing it because its mine... you just saw this... decided to read it... you don't know what your talking about.... why don't you just shut up...
Nevermind, that's giving me a headache already.
You are definitely bashing it because it's mine. I mean, your argument doesn't even make any sense. First, it was that I didn't know what it was about. Now, it's that I took too long to illustrate my point. Right, because those entire novels that illustrate a single point in the form of satire are much shorter. While I agree it could be streamlined, there really isn't a whole lot in there that should be cut out to make the pacing better or the story more concise, not enough to make it a terrible paper anyways. Also, the reason that it's somewhat sloppier than other people's is that when it's half a page long, it's really easy to make nice and clean. Doesn't make it good, it makes it quick. Either way, it ( ... )
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you see how annoying it is when someone doesn't respond to your argument just insults you personally...this isn't about my use of ellipse...or my half-assed satire i threw together in five seconds to garnish a grade...it's about you making a big deal of your satire...that isn't you good...you're topic isn't unique or contrversial...and you approach it in a bad way...that has all the making for a bad piece of writing...nothing is a "unique topic" and i never said mine was...everything has been said before...
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What it isn't however, is terrible because of few problems. It's still amusing, and generally effective.
I can so take criticism. Based on your comments and some thoughts of my own, I'm revising the ending and other parts.
Everything is relative. If nothing is unique then the word for unique would change in meaning to mean relatively unique, something that is less done or not cliched and overused. So, relatively, it is fairly unique, and relatively, it is controversial, because a lot of people do just hate people because they stereotype. You can't just say I approach it in a "bad" way. Why is it bad? Because I efficiently whore every stereotype through an amusing anecdote, proving you can't just hide in one and hate all the others? No, that's good ( ... )
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I didn't use an ellipse right there...what?!?
And i was kidding about the not open to criticism thing...that was used to prove a point...
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So HA!
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