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solacedoll

Fic: Bright Light City

Jan 02, 2009 20:40

Title: Bright Light City
Pairing: David Archuleta/David Cook
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: 2762
Summary: His dad'd suggested Vegas for his eighteenth, and his mom's eyes had nearly popped out of her head, but his dad had said, in a firm sort of voice, "for tourist attractions," and Claudia's smirk had dug into her cheek.

Disclaimer: Er, they were both ( Read more... )

Comments 51

sundayschild January 3 2009, 02:55:26 UTC

Okay, I...was going to try to leave a coherent comment here, but the most I can seem to come up with right now is "AWESOME", and then to quote some of your own lines back at you, so...

"There is no way," says David, "that dad will not find out." He punctuates his sentence by jabbing the button for their floor. "I have a plan," says Claudia, and David's stomach drops. The last time he had heard her voice like that (let's catch frogs), well.

HEE. :D Just...HEE. I think I like Claudia. :D

"Much," says David, dazed. Cook extracts himself from the embrace, and David has that empty feeling again, against the pit of his stomach.

*winces* Ouch. I felt that like a sucker punch to the stomach. The way you describe him as...as empty when Cook stops touching him; like he only felt whole when Cook's hand was on his arm, or he was hugging him, and when he stopped, it was like physically loosing something...

They are about halfway through the burger when David pauses, his arm touching Cook's lightly. "You seem to be drinking an awful lot," he ( ... )

solacedoll January 3 2009, 04:52:34 UTC

Thank you so so much! I like the long comments as much as the short ones, or any, in general, hahah. Long ones though because it's awesome what parts jumped out at you, as a reader, and it's always lovely to get feedback. So thank you, again!

rajkumari905 January 3 2009, 02:55:39 UTC

Oh my goshhhhhhhh. Sequel?

Haha, I totally loved this. I love flirty!Archie and mischievious!Claudia and the part with David bringing Amber made me lol a lot.

Seeeeequel? *Archie eyes*

solacedoll January 3 2009, 05:10:03 UTC

This is actually all there is, but I'm so glad you enjoyed this! <33

hime2emeh January 3 2009, 03:02:13 UTC

omg! plz tell me that is NOT the end! what happen next?!!!

um, in case i didn't make myself clear... i really like the premise :D (and hope to read more).

solacedoll January 3 2009, 05:13:27 UTC

The premise, is, um, actually David and Cook did that themselves, they were both in Vegas around this time, so writing it wasn't the hard part. (( : Aaw, and this part is actually the end, I didn't plan on writing more, sorry!

megami284 January 3 2009, 03:10:15 UTC

I loved it. Archie coping a feel of Cooks butt and Claudia trying to be adventurous.

This story deserves a sequel. Please?

solacedoll January 3 2009, 05:31:16 UTC

Hahah, that scene, I meant for David to do it unintentionally, but Cook think all "BEING GROPED," because he totally is, and, yeah! No sequel planned actually, I'm sorry!

silvercrystal1 January 3 2009, 03:13:22 UTC

dskasdfaaertttfddasfhilugerwiaf

*flails*

I loved this. Sequel? New chapter? Please?

solacedoll January 3 2009, 06:48:28 UTC

No sequel planned, but thank you for loving, and commenting, and flailing! <3