[Fic] Piano Song -- Jasper/Bella

[solimena]

Title: Piano Song
Fandom: Twilight
Characters: Jasper/Bella
Rating: PG
Word Count: 612
Summary: "That was her problem at the moment. With the transformation, she became more animal than human, in her thoughts and behaviours."
Note: This just happened. I couldn't stop it from pouring out. I like this a lot and I'm pretty proud.

It shocked him at first.

Comments

[morlockiness]

This was really beautiful and perfect. But also sad because of the ending. I particularly liked the compariosn you made of the piano note as a substitute for a beating heart.

[yoursolace]

oh. oh. this is fabulous, so powerful. the piano bit? ow, that HURT.

There she was, his new sister Bella, staring maniacally at the piano, playing one note over and over, trying to substitute the beat of her heart that would never sound again. Thump-thump.

ohhhh, i love that. how creative!

[boromirslover]

this was a great story! I hope you add to this. I would love to read more. :-)

[windblownglass]

oh, this is great. There she was, his new sister Bella, staring maniacally at the piano, playing one note over and over, trying to substitute the beat of her heart that would never sound again. Thump-thump.

but because she had caught a glimpse of Bella’s very indecisive mind making its first bad decision, one link in a very long chain of events to come.
i like how sad and smooth this is, dear. fantastic job.

[aboutademongirl]

Oh... *whimpers* Poor Alice. Poor Edward. Poor Bella. Poor Jasper.. Poor everyone!