Subtle - Chapter 4 (First Draft)
Today, as I am dribbling the Tennis Ball in my racket, I am thinking of what happened last week at the Nurse Office. It’s not that I don’t like it, and it’s not like I’d hate him for it. In fact I like it very much, and I crave it, a few centimeters from my mouth, a few centimeters before it touches my lips, it was so close, I was so close to being
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I only have a few things to say:
→About Sakuno, try to... calm her a bit? And perhaps make her a bit more- sensitive. @__@ I don't know what's the right term for this but- I just want to hit her in the head all over again. DX (I deserve death for that. *gets stoned*)
→Regarding Ryoma, in the "perverted" part (note the quotation marks. *shot*), maybe make him look like he's... innocent or something. XD Like his totally canon dense self.
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