LOL IDK WHAT YOU WERE WORRIED ABOUT. Kai sounds like himself lol he would defend her cuteness even if it's a little... superficial... but that's what makes Kai "Kai".... Takumi also sounds really fed up with this Kai+girls situation which is just about accurate SO YOU'RE GOOD
I like how you wrote the battle scene. ESPECIALLY HOW IT STARTS, how she hits him with confuse ray first... man lmao *__________* it seems to be very well thought out and jfldasjf;laksdlf IDK I JUST LOVE HOW HE'S NOT HESITATING WITH BATTLE EVEN THOUGH I TOLD YOU IDK IT MAKES HIM SEEM MUCH MORE MANLY NOW AND RAJA CAN'T STEP ON HIM COMPLETELY RIGHT *~* I feel so bad for her, though. Her stress/tension from turning human and feeling left out/behind ;0;
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What I really appreciate the most though, is that your characters AND my characters are talking lol. Like, it's not just a select few who are relevant to the situation (which would usually be Kai, Takumi, Raja, and Hajime) but even Kazuya and Julian make an appearance! I really like that sort of thing because it shows that even though Kai and Raja were the main focus, you were able to pull the others into it too. I guess it's mostly just awareness of the situation and providing feedback about it. What would characters be if they could bounce a relationship off another character for opinions? ;0; or something like that sdlkjfa;lsdf /idk if i make sense
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