What's missing?

[soprano1790]

Luci turned her key in the lock and tugged carelessly on the door. It had been a long day, and all she wanted was to be left alone. Her head was heavy, her throat scratchy and raw, and she felt as though she had been living in a daze

Comments

[irradescent]

I'm glad you're participating. I really do love your writing style

[soprano1790]

Thank you. I'm enjoying it again, and I can't believe I ever let real life get in the way!

[____hejira]

Oooo *shudder* I was not expecting something so creepy coming out of you. It is the best thing you've written so far by a mile. I'd like to see a little more elaboration, perhaps on how the girl died. Even if you didn't want to spell it out specifically, alluding to it would add to the piece.

[soprano1790]

Thank you. I didn't really expect it either.

I completely agree with you, and I thought a lot about it. The problem was that I couldn't decide how she was killed, and I really wanted to go to bed. Lol Maybe I'll write more about these people...

[gingergirlslove]

Wow...very well written, I agree with being extremely curious about at least a hint of the cod...but it is STILL a great piece, and I think I would feel the same way.

[soprano1790]

Thank you. Now I'm thinking I really should write another entry about her murder. Hmmmmm.

[whipchick]

How terrible - what a tragic dashing of Luci's hopes.

[soprano1790]

Yes, it's a tragedy. And that's the point of the story... The effect on Luci. At least, I think that was the point of the story. Lol

[ravenshrinkery]

Ooof. Ouch. Nicely written.

[soprano1790]

Thank you!