Angst

[sordidlilthing]

Mikhail
By: Mushroom
Freeverse

Comments

[star_flare]

I love the poetry.
The wordplay is just BEAUTIFUL.
If I quoted, I think I'd be quoting every life. =____=;;
And even though it's slash (well, it reads like slash to me, so if I'm wrong, sorry D=), it's still very nice. Powerful in its simplicity.

Allow me to express my dearest and sincerest words for you
My good friend.
Comma after "you", before "my good friend". XD

They’re my favorites, especially when you wear them.
XD
You really have a way with words and ideas.

And you feel something
Maybe…you can tell me what it is?
I think you're supposed to punctuate after "something"?

Oh me?
Comma after "oh".

good lord he’s off
Comma after "lord", but maybe this was deliberate. *shot*

Again, lots of emotions on this prose. I can feel the dismay, the edge of bitterness when he was discussing the woman. I also love how you ended it.

[star_flare]

If I quoted, I think I'd be quoting every life.
I'm whiny about my life at the moment, so excuse that typo. I meant "line", of course. ^^;;

PS// I've also read the latest chapter of your Seth and Julian story (I still think of it as "Pallid, Rigid, Nude", so I can't really quite catch the actual title, which is a BIIIIG difference--pretty stupid, huh?), but I haven't quite gotten around reviewing it. But I will, someday. XD

[sordidlilthing]

Take your time in reviewing! (Although I'm actually waiting for your comment to go and work on the epilogue) :D I know you're busy XD

[sordidlilthing]

Ooh, thank you! I actually thought I was losing my touch in poetry already... T___T

Thank you for the corrections (AGAIN)! You really ARE my ultimate beta-reader. XD

Glad you liked the prose as well. :3:3:3 I have a gay friend, and I decided to write a story for him regarding his feelings. He's obsessed in love with a straight man, apparently. ;_;

[minnow_53]

I have a gay friend, and I decided to write a story for him regarding his feelings. He's obsessed in love with a straight man, apparently.

Yay, so I understood it as well as liked it! That's very sweet and sad.

^_^xx

[sordidlilthing]

Thank you~~~ *showers with confetti*

[chastity_rowan]

but what do I care of them?)

The ladies or the fashion? Teehee~~

This reminds me of gay Englishmen in tights

[sordidlilthing]

Hahah, that's the catch. It looks like he means the fashion, but it's really the ladies he's referring to.

It really helps, reading fanfics made by brilliant British authors. XD

[yume_kokoro]

I love the rythmic fluidity to "Mikhail" - the imagery is very arresting.
as for "The Monologue of Yet Another Tortured Man to His Most Desired" - it reads like a love story that just leaves a person breathless - I almost wish you'd expand it into a story - but the style is unique, so it's perfect the way it is.

[sordidlilthing]

Ooh, thank you for reviewing! XD *hearts*

I'm glad you liked and understood the Monologue. I thought it would be too incoherent for readers to comprehend.

[aki_yuki]

Oh, this is beautiful. That's... that's it. It's beautiful. I think it's a nice piece to use in a declamation, though. It has really strong emotions hidden between the lines.

...because it hurts, it hurts when you don’t listen.
I just love that last line. <3

[mushroom18]

OMG I JUST NOTICED THIS NOW!!! *bangs head on wall*

Thank you...very much. I enjoyed writing it as well. I miss you! *hugs*