Happily Ever After

[southernbellakv]

This is my entry for October, week one. The topic is: Begin the writing with "There it goes."

*Based on a true story, although the names have been changed to protect the innocent.

There it goes. Her glassy blue eyes watched as the plane flew over the road she was driving on. With a restrained sniffle, she returned her gaze to the street, trying

Comments

[mermaidbia]

I can relate to this.
So, so, so fucking well.
Only for me there was no happy ending.

[taste_is_sweet]

Yeah. Me too. Long-distance relationships generally suck. I'm very happy for you that you got such a happy ending to yours! Not to mention that he moved for you--that's rare.

[southernbellakv]

Awww, that just means your happy ending is yet to come.

[southernbellakv]

Yeah, he moved all the way down here for me. :) I haven't stopped hearing about it since. LOL He can't take the heat.

[cedarwolfsinger]

Happy ending! Huzzah! There are so few happy endings on the Flame... I'm so glad this is one! Good luck!

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[innana88]

This is such a sweet and heartfelt piece! Well done! I think it rings true for anyone who's been in a long-distance relationship. It definitely did for me

[desert_rose]

Hi there,

I'm one of your editors for this entry, and I'm very glad I am!

I can totally relate to the feelings so beautifully expressed in this piece! You describe the feelings of a newly in love girl so well. I've been in that place, including having to say goodbye, so know that the way you described how Cynthia felt is so true! Very nicely done. I did shed a few tears, which though making me sad, shows how your writing really touches the reader! Excellent work!

Time flew as quickly as a snail trapped in a pool of molasses as she waited for the minutes to tick away. I love this! It definitely describes how slowly time moves when we're impatient for something good to begin!

Your formatting is great- paragraphs are at a length that makes the piece very easy to read! Your use of punctuation is very good, too!

All around a great entry, that I love to bits! Very nicely done!

Thanks for the great read!

[libra_dragon]

Hello,

One of your editors here and it looks like a few had already noted some edits. So I can't really find anything else I would add. I do agree with what the others noted.

Lovely entry by the way and good luck!

[southernbellakv]

Thank you everybody for the suggestions. If I decide to go through and edit, I will definately take them into consideration.