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sowritesauds

Traces: Part Four

Jun 13, 2011 21:20

PART FOUR

“So, you’ve been going through my underwear drawer?”

Annie smiled ruefully, rolling her eyes as she crossed the room to Jeff. She sat down on the foot of the bed with one leg crossed under her and one dangling over the edge. They shared a smile, and she looked down sheepishly, then fixed him with one of her wide-eyed stares. It ( Read more... )

Comments 14

elsiesnuffin June 14 2011, 02:20:02 UTC

Aw, smutless smut. Sneaky. I'm very excited to see where they're going to take Jeff on their outing. Looking forward to more!

sowritesauds June 14 2011, 23:49:49 UTC

Haha, well I promised smut and didn't deliever so I decided it was time for Jeff to have a smexy dream!

I'm glad you're enjoying it. Part Five should be up in a few days! :)

stephanierb June 14 2011, 02:43:35 UTC

A dream? Ugh, you're killing me! lol

I loved that they spent the night together and that Jeff, while still conflicted, is having so many mushy feelings about Annie.

I can't even begin to imagine the kind of adventure you have in store, but I'm looking forward to finding out. Great job as usual.

sowritesauds June 14 2011, 23:50:57 UTC

Haha, hey, a dream is one step in the right direction... his subconscious is trying to tell him something!

Thanks so much, I hope you like what's next! :)

crittab June 14 2011, 03:03:07 UTC

I love this story... this whole chapter just left me with the biggest, goofiest grin.

Thanks for updating so quickly! :D

sowritesauds June 14 2011, 23:51:14 UTC

That's such a compliment! Thank you! :)

sowritesauds June 14 2011, 23:51:41 UTC

P.S. GUH. YOUR ICON. JOEL'S ARMS. WOW.

engelen June 14 2011, 05:57:11 UTC

Oh Jeff... even though flabby and pale, your face and heart are beautiful and muscular. Do not worry, Annie will be turned on by your personality anyway.
<3

Also, yaaaaay for updates :D

sowritesauds June 14 2011, 23:52:59 UTC

I only put that in there because Jeff WOULD think he was getting flabby after missing exercise for a few days... there is no way that chisel goes away that easily though! He hasn't SEEN flabby until he's seen my stomach! haha

Glad you're still liking it! :)

engelen June 15 2011, 07:15:03 UTC

LOL, poor, insecure Jeff ):

But my comment stands, even though Annie was totally oogling that perfect torso of his, she would love him for his winning personality :P (LOL, I mean she's attracted to "bad boys," according to Dan Harmon).

teruel_a_witch June 14 2011, 12:49:44 UTC

Awesome, I'm really enjoying your Jeff's POV and damn that dream was HOT, I always find fantasies in fanfic nearly hotter than the actual deal.

Also, the way they had some innocent fun and just fell asleep like this was the cutest thing ever <3

I need to stop being sick of people before they get sick of me
Great Jeff's acute observations here, I love when personal growth shows inside the character's head)

So excited to where you are taking this story (I do hope that chapter 5 isn't really the last like you'd initially planned, feels like there is more to say and do, and I'll just be sad to see it go so quickly, I'm REALLY hooked :D)

sowritesauds June 14 2011, 23:55:41 UTC

Thank you so much, that is so great to hear. I'm really glad you like his POV. And yeah, I really like fantasies in fic too, because it's what the character WANTS to happen, not what is ACTUALLY happening. Jeff's subconscious is trying to tell him something!

Thanks so much for reviewing, I'm really glad that you're liking it. I definitely don't think 5 will be the last... there is a lot more that needs to happen, and I seem to be writing a lot more detail than I meant too. I'm glad you're hooked!